Chriscy, you say that you love kidfics, and here it certainly shows in the best possible way! The kids here are adorable, especially Lori. I'm not such an all-out kid lover myself, but how can you
not love this?
I was so scared! And there were monsters and scary people and they were chasing Jack and me and I fell. And then I called for you and I was crying and I was crying and you weren't there.
FoLCs, isn't this a perfect description of one of those childhood nightmares that you, too, must remember having? Except that Lori's nightmare may have been for real, the way she talks about Clark and Jack and herself all being hurt by kryptonite - that sounds plausible - and Lois not being there, which we know is true! Wow! Is it even remotely possible that Lois's family was attacked by someone using kryptonite, while she herself was on the lam having a coffee with Lucy? Well, probably not, because I guess it really only
is the kind of nightmare that a half-Kryptonian child missing her mother might be having. Yeah, probably. But this is great stuff, the way you write Lori so that it takes me down memory lane back to
my childhood. And I
love the way you bring out the caring mother in Lois!
And then how you write Clark! So caring, so tender and so - full of lies? Arrgghh! He's lying to her AGAIN!!! He's not going to TELL her that she is married to SUPERMAN???
He knew he was just putting off the inevitable, but he didn't relish going through the whole revelation thing again with her, considering how it went last time.
GRRRR...
Did you know that back in the sixties, the Flash, the fastest man on earth, who was then Barry Allen, was the first of the comic book heroes from DC Comics to get married? And did you know that he didn't tell his wife that the man she was married to was anything more than plain old Barry Allen at all? I remember a story where he was sneaking out of bed at night to run off and do his heroics without her having any sort of clue about her husband's extracurricular activities!
But, hey! Chriscy, I'm so glad to see that Lois in your story isn't taken in all that easily. She's spying on Clark when he's telling Lori that she mustn't talk to Mommy about Superman at all. And then the next morning, she is greeting Lori and Jack so sweetly - I
loved that! - but she doesn't kiss Clark, not at first:
Lois noticed that he looked very handsome and she almost wanted to return his warmth, but she held back. He wasn't as innocent as he appeared; she thought she could trust him, but he was hiding something from her! So instead, she settled for a polite good morning. Lois noticed that his smile faltered.
Ah, but she doesn't get away with that:
"Mommy, you forgot to kiss Daddy good morning!" Jack said pointedly.
LOL! Well, there's nothing for it, she has to kiss him:
She eyed Clark warily before stepping to him and quickly pressing a kiss to his face, then separating from him just as suddenly.
Ah, but she isn't getting away from him that easily:
"Daddy!" Lori whined and motioned at Lois.
"Alright, alright. Fine." Lois said impatiently as she walked back to Clark's side and waited for his slightly hesitant, hasty kiss.
Oh, Lois, you don't know what you are letting yourself in for:
She wasn't prepared for the chill that raced down her spine when Clark's lips touched her, making them blush.
Lois and Clark's children as matchmakers for their parents! I love it! Hey, I love all of this. It's an absolutely delightful story, Chriscy. Can't wait for the next part!
Ann
P.S. Lori, eh? To me, that name comes with all sorts of bad associations and connotations, because of the way Lori Lemaris the mermaid came between Lois and Clark so awfully about ten years ago in the comic books. Anyway, in part two of your story, you called Clark and Lois's daughter Lora - Lora Marie Kent. Not Lori. And their son was called Jonathan Clark Kent.
P.P.S. That's a
great new avatar!
Next part, please! 
