Well you've definately got my attention. I can't wait to see what's going on. Great start! Welcome to the board Chriscy!

Jackie


EDIT: Just changing the header of the post to reflect that Chriscky has now got a title for her story. Yay, Chriscy! <g>

Definitely looks interesting.

I would like to read more.

James

Keep going!!

I'd like to see what happens, too.

~Toc

Very interesting beginning, Chriscy! Intriguing and fascinating, and as you can see you already have us demanding more. )

Ah, this is going to be a "me too" post. I'd like to see where you take this. The story is looking good so far. Lots of nice hooks to grab the readers attention.

Chris

Hi,

Great start. I don't know the movie but I like it.

You should continue.

:rolleyes: I don't like stories with out title so she need a tentative title for now.

How about "Lois' Comfort and Joy"? Unless does are the kids name?

More ASAP, Please.

MAF

Very interesting premise.

Very intriguing! Can't wait to read the story so post again soon!!

Totally intrigued by this, too. Can't wait to see more of Lois' reaction as reality unfolds. More please.

Okay, so I was updating the TOCs and accidentally got hooked reading the comments. I do that a lot.

So, naturally, I had to go read. And...intriguing. Has anyone else mentioned intriguing? Well, I'm going to say intriguing anyway. So there. Because it definitely is!

This bit was way too short, of course. <g> That's my only complaint. I like your writing style, you have some lovely prose in there.

What else? Oh yeah - more soon, please!

LabRat

I'm a nerdy language student).

Anyway, I'm going to post a chapter soon, hopefully before interest runs out, but now I need to go back and edit it to make sure POVs are consistent! Don't want to make that mistake anymore.

And I'm really green, so...how long should a chapter be? I didn't think my story was long because it's only 9 pages so far, but I write with a size 10 font and apparently it's already 69Kb. Suggestions would be much appreciated!

I'll be right back after some errands and post the next part tonight, I promise!

Chriscy

Hi Chriscy!

I really love this so far! I feel repetitive saying what others have said (

I LOVE that title! So much layered meaning, really, and just... Perfect Perfect!!!!

I am holding you to your promise of a post tonight!!!

~NICOLE

I'll ditto Labrat on this one: intriguing.

The end, with her wondering about using her Tae Kwon Do moves was hilarious

Looking forward to the next part.

very interesting premise!
I'm looking forward to read where you're going to go with this particular situation!

simona