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Hi Mouserocks,

What a fun story. And what is this world coming to? You wrote a WAFFy piece, and I've been mulling over the beginnings of a WHAM-my story that I thought would probably be too depressing for most readers, but that I thought that you, specifically, would appreciate. (It's not a death-fic, but it does discuss a very serious topic.)

Thanks for posting this bit of WAFF.

Joy,
Lynn

Oh I love it! So sweet. Right up my alley.

AWWW!!!! You wrote a WAFFY!!! Love it!

Wait, are you a clone? A WAFFy writing clone?

So glad to see you posting, and fluff at that! Love it!!!

Great little story. The perfect read for this lazy July 4th. Lois and Clark sure are lucky to have each other.

So this little vignette was perfect for today. It was a slow day for me, too; a lazy, too-much-dessert and too many hamburgers kind of 4th of July. I've been Lois-and-Clark-ing my days away here lately (in a way that only a teacher on summer break can) and I've fallen back in love with my favorite show (it was that darn pic of Dean and Teri back together in Australia that did it). Anyway, all that to say that I'm so glad to see that after so many years, people are still posting stories and giving life to these characters. I love it!

Specifically, I loved that I could see all this happening. Lois's boredom, Clark offering to get her coffee, her checking him out as he walked away ... speaking of that, this para had me giggling:



Ha, Pheromone-Lois. That's great - I've never heard it described quite that way, but it makes total sense for her to think back to that situation in that way! Made me smile.

I wasn't completely sure what season we were in until you had Lois mention Lex and the room go a bit quiet, people stopping their work to look at her. Love the way you had her do it boldly:



Yup. This is Lois. She messed up, but she's not backing down. Wanted to note, too, that this para made the end - when she tells Clark her true feelings towards him - believable for me. You can tell by the way that she throws Lex's name into the conversation that she's made her peace with what happened and she's ready to move on... in the form of Clark Kent

Coolest thing for me in this story? I love that we get to see the first time they go back to Centennial Park after... well, everything. That's something I never thought about, but I love that you did it here. I thought the double-meaning "What are we doing here?" question was great, too.

Their conversation was really well-done here, too, in particular this line from Clark:


It makes sense that it would be hard for him to slide back into that friendly, partner role after laying his heart at her feet, regardless of what he said to her to take it back. I like that you had him bring it up. One note on that line I quoted, though - I had to reread it (and the lines preceding it) a few times before I realized that it was Clark talking. Maybe it just needs a speaker tag before you have her glancing at him? I like that it's from her POV and she can see the hurt on his face, but I was confused for a second. (Could just be me reading this at midnight, though!)

The kiss was terrific (my favorite part of any story involving these two!) and I liked how you had Lois wanting to play a little hooky now that their feelings for each other were out in the open. All in all, it was a great vignette - thanks for posting! I really enjoyed it.

Tracey

Thanks everybody!

Lynn: Wh-wha-wHAT?! Post it, post it, post it! You know I enjoy anything with a dark twist.

JackieK: Thanks so much! Glad you liked it. Was going for sweet but sometimes it's hard for me to stick the landing there, you know? Sometimes you look up from the keys and *poof* three characters are dead.

folc4evernaday: Don't get used to it. I like my WAFF to come out of left field and thanks

DC: What? No. No clones here. Why would you bring that up? *hides jar of frogs* Ahem. If anything, there's a possibility that I have an evil twin. Or a good twin? Hmm... Maybe she wrote this story. I have a reputation to uphold.

Tracey: wow! your feedback is So glad you enjoyed this lazy little ficlet. I wanted to toy with the summer break between seasons-- so much action happens during the season, I thought maybe it'd justify a little slow-down in the summer heat. (It's hot where I'm at, but at least it hasn't been 110+ degrees hot this week.) Also I didn't exactly know where I was going with this when I started writing it, so I'm glad you thought the motivations, et. al. were clear and consistent.

Plus I totally see what you're saying about that line-- def will rework it for the archives!

- Mouse

Secondary comment here to say how sorry I am for littering that last post with maybe too many emojis. It looks like I was writing a story for Highlights magazine. Yeesh. In my defense, it looked better in UBB code.

This has got to be a clone. Mouserocks doing waffy? What an awesome change of events! If you feel the need to write more stories like this, please don't hesitate. Believe me they will be much appreciated. Besides, it's summer, leave the heavy stuff for winter!

So glad to see Lois meeting the relationship problem head on, like folks do in real life. Kudos for them playing hookey, every once in awhile, ya gotta take some time to feel the breeze on your face and the scent of flowers in the air.

In any case, I was in definite need of a touch of romance yesterday and this little very story fit the bill perfectly. Many thanks!

Lovely WAFFY story perfect for the holiday and hot weather. Love Lois's self-awareness, and her awareness of Clark's feelings.

This was great. I love how you capture Clark's worldview, how he sees and values the little things. It's a bit of a theme in the series, remember the window scene in the townhouse? It makes me think and remember all the little things I value. Thanks for that, cause it's so easy to forget. I also love his boldness when he kisses her. No hesitation or even warning, just doing what they've both wanted for so long. Great story, thank you for sharing with us!

Oh, that was so sweet. I understand why they were both scared in the show and that's why he took it back and then she decided not to share her feelings and then they danced around each other for another six months or more .... (it's probably more like real life that we'd like to admit), but I really liked how Lois confronted Clark about taking back his declaration. Such WaFF!

What I liked the most about the story was how the two leads attacked the relationship problem in a mature fashion rather than the immature way they do it in most fan fiction. Sometimes restraint is the advisable approach but many times restraint was just an aside for lack of confidence that both of them showed in just about every other aspect of their lives.

Great story! Sorry but I tend to just ignore your angsty/WHAM ones...

Mike

Morgana: Thanks! Glad you liked. I'll post the WAFF when it strikes me, of course. Or rather, if it strikes me (actually it's been hitting me more often lately, must be the lazy sunny afternoons). Your comment on saving the drama for winter is duly noted.

cuidadora: Thank you! Tried to stay in Lois' head the whole time, glad her awareness came through.

PuffyTiger: HI! I don't know if we've met yet, so hello! Thanks for commenting. I love that scene, and it's one of my (albeit many) reasons for loving Clark-- Lois needs that sort of grounding in her life.

BJ: Yeah, I get why they did it slow like that on the show (heck, I've been there even, def. got some IRL similarities). Lois' confidence was shaken after Lex, Clark's confidence was shaken, and it was too early to get them together for real for ratings' sakes, but I wanted to play with a bit bolder versions of them in this timeline.

Mike: LOL! Totally fine! Everybody's got a preference. If it helps I'm trying to steer a little bit further away from angst and more towards drama? Although that might just be the evil part of me saying it's not dark enough... it's all subjective. Great point about their confidence in everything else, it's a good way to kind of highlight their awkwardness in some sense to have them both be "bad at relationships" but I think you're right in having their confidence levels match their reactions.

Thanks again everybody!