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Anna that was so nice!!! Hehehehe so are we going to have a revelation before its time or what? This has to go on! wooohoo!

There are simply no excuses for you not to make a sequence

MDL (nagging as usual

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Oh cute idea! Laura

Oh, I like it, Anna!

Wendy

That was a cute story. I like revelation stories. I think this one needs to be continued.

Like I said earlier, I like this story. I like Clark's lame attempt at an excuse, and Lois' scepticism. And then the last line is great.

Hi,

Cute!

Anna, that was great!

I love how we see Lois's suspicion grow through Clark's eyes. From innocent to dangerous in 6.7 seconds

His excuse is priceless. "I had an accident, and I was unconscious for three days, but I'm fine now, and look... not a scratch on me!"

Now... where's that sequel?

Dave (Who thinks if we push, we might get 2 pages

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Gotta love Lois's deductive powers.

Hi Anna,

Very nicely done!

But I agree with David. Where's the sequel?

Yours Jenni

hehe, a fun, cute short story! I love the pace that the present tense moves at!

It was so cute how he couldn't stick to his story... he covers up his tracks all the time, but he couldn't actually continue to lie when she told him she knew that wasn't the truth. He is too moral... and too in love

Too Clark!

Anyway, a sequel would be fun... she could really mess with him

~NICOLE

Anna

A wonderful story!

I thoroughly enjoyed it and hope you write a sequel.

Tricia

Lots of fun, Anna.

Really liked the use of the first person - Clark's hospital excuse was so bad.

Also really liked the quick, brief jump to Lois's POV at the end.

c

Loved this!!

Good job!

Irene

Wow, look at all this feedback! Thank you so much, FoLCs!!

To those requesting a sequel... it is very likely that you get one. I promise nothing, though - school starts on Monday...

Thanks again!
See ya,
AnnaBtG.

I loved how you just start up this conversation out of the blue (except we've seen the show!) and it works. It doesn't matter that there's nothing before it, and nothing after it. It just works.

Nancy

Revelation stories are my favourite type.

I agree with the previous post - it sits well on it's own. I like how I feel like I'm jumping into something and then leaving it. Oh, how I want more.

Hmmmm, anything else in the works???!!!!!!!

Hi Anna,

Your fic rec on Discord triggered this archeological expedition

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There's nothing inquisitive in her voice. More like good-natured curiosity. After all, I'm her partner, and I *did* disappear for three days, while we were in the midst of a story, without even letting my parents know.

/points at the superman-shaped indentation on Lois’s sofa/ But he was right *there*.

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I gesture around very lamely. Her expression has hardened; she has realized that I'm trying to keep something from her. And she doesn't seem to like this concept at all.

He’s indeed on dangerous terrain here.

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"See, I was… I had an accident," I invent wildly. "Friday morning. On my way here. They took me to the hospital. I was just discharged yesterday evening."

Nurse Mayson nursed him back to life?

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"I wish I could tell you," I blurt out. How smooth of me.

He’s a secret agent!

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"Okay, so why can't you?"
I hear an alarm go off, and voices. 'Fire! Fire!'
I'm saved. Or, I'm dead meat. Or both.
"I have to go," I say.

Yeah, that’s gonna go over well…

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we're in the middle of a conversation and suddenly he's running off like he's Superman to the rescue or something…
…Wait a minute, what did I just say?

Oops?

So, does Lois need to buy him one or both of the following books:
"Lying...for Dummies"
"Secret identifies...for Dummies"

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THE END

Hey!

/peeks/ Oh, right. See you in the sequel!

Michael