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Comments are love.

"Comments are love" and my comment is that I love this part. What a fun scene. You handled the numerous (mis)understandings between characters brilliantly.

And on a more serious note, I agree with Clark: Lane's parents will probably not be very happy campers when they return home; their little boy will have grown up so much in their absence. Granted, they should have had "the talk" with him long since, but even so, it will surely hurt them to know how many milestones in his life they will have missed out on.

Looking forward to part five.

Joy,
Lynn

Hehehw! What fun! Looking forward to more.

What a mixed up universe! Lois can cook????

This-Was-Great! Loved the last line of dialogue

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You did such a wonderful job with all the different conversation meanings going on.

Laura

Great part, I love the dialogues and the hidden meanings, well written.
You're killing me, this part is so short, waiting eagerly for the next part.

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Lois awoke to the smell of burnt toast. She followed her nose down to the kitchen, where she found Clark and Lane staring at something black in a frying pan. "What's going on?" she asked.

LANE:

Trying to emulate Momma’s cooking?

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"Lane and I were just...ah...having a little cooking lesson."

Trying to prove maternity?

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"I see he takes after his mother in the cooking department," Lois said with a smirk.

See?

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Lane blinked at her

Oh? So, Lois *can* cook, huh?

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"What are you talking about?" said Lane. "My mom is a great cook!"

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Lois snorted. "I knew she wasn't really Lois Lane," she muttered.

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"Does Superman...?" he whispered, tapping his glasses.

"Superman!" Lois exclaimed. "That's a great idea, Clark! If anyone can help us, he can."

Lane shook his head at Clark.

"But then how...?" Clark whispered to the boy.

Lane shrugged. "You're asking me?!" he whispered back.

Did Clark just ask how Superman transforms into a girl to safe the day?

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"Er..." Clark looked out the window again. "How about if we split up? We'll cover more ground that way."

Lane glanced out the window, then frowned at Clark. "You're kidding," he said softly.

Clark shrugged.

*Something’s* going on. Something more than just Lane being a smartass.

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"You know," Lane said slowly, looking at Clark, "I...think I might have left my...homework...over at Jake's house."

Clark's eyes widened. "No!" he said firmly, "your parents would kill me!"

Oh boy. Wants to do ‘homework’? Oh boy oh boy oh boy. He’s not even dressed to go out!

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Lois rolled her eyes. "Clark, I think he's probably old enough to go to a friend's house and get his homework."

Lane gave Clark a pleading look. They both glanced out the window. "Only if I go with you," Clark relented.

ALT-LOIS: You allowed him *what*?
LOIS: Don’t look at me. It’s *HIS* fault!
CLARK:

ALT-CLARK:

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Clark followed close behind. "Wait!" he called. "We haven't discussed what you're wearing!"

See?

Michael