Feedback folder for the second chapter of A Week in Paris

This is both different AND very interesting. Lois has some real decisions to make here. Clark does too but he is pretty clueless to that need. The idea that Lois figured out C=S is not a real stretch given they both left at the same time and her relationship with both went to hell at just about the same time. Plus she did not have Clark (or Dan for that long) to distract her in her analysis.

I like the way that you are exploring both the relationship and the investigation fully. Sometimes one gets the short end of the stick at the expense of the other. I also wonder how long before Clark drops the I am not working this as that is not what I do anymore and I have to be in Vienna thing and gets fully involved as this could be a BIG story and Lois does not know Paris...

I love the direction you are heading and look forward to the next chapter.

Mike

It will be interesting to see how long Lois keeps her knowledge about Superman a secret. Hopefully, Clark won't be concerned that her seemingly new feelings for him only exist because of his alter ego.

Ha! Superman travelling in Fiat Panda... You've just made my day
This story gets more interesting by the minute...

I am enjoying this romance/detective story! I am chuckling thinking about Clark squeezed into a tiny Fiat Panda!

Lois knows the secret? Truly a change of events!

Tell us, what is your posting schedule like?

I have to echo what Mike stated in that I really, also, am enjoying how you are covering both the investigation and the relationship aspect of this story. It's come across as a very seemless balance, and I find myself drawn to both aspects.

Hmmm. Lois already knowing Clark is Superman. I like that detail. The fact that they (Clark and Superman) both went overseas fairly close in time together was a pretty big clue. Like was mentioned in the story, so is some distance--some time to reflect. Really curious how long Lois will keep that secret to herself...

Clark heading to Vienna tomorrow night? No!!! Keep that boy in Paris, please? . After the information they are learning today though, I can see the story taking top priority work-wise. And obviously, I hope ( again), once Lois and Clark get some time together--to talk, to be honest, to 'feel' what they really feel--this investigation will be completely important for a totally different reason .

Love the story--can't wait for more!
Laura

Thanks MikeM I"m trying to keep it balanced. This story originally had a very, very long preamble which I decided to dispense with simply because it took way too long to get to the A-plot. I thought dropping the preamble would make for a stronger story, and I still think I was right to get rid of it (although it pained me to scrap that much hard work).


Haha, yeah. I tried to come up with the most ridiculously small car I could think of to stuff Clark in with those broad shoulders of his. I know very few European cars (I'm Aussie), so I'm glad the Panda worked.


I'm trying to update it once a week, Morgana. I've got a few chapters up my sleeve yet so I can keep ahead

Thanks everyone for your feedback, I'm really enjoying reading your reactions to the story

Still reading. Still enjoying. Very busy and sick (again. Damn summer colds), so don't have much time for a thorough FDK, but wanted to let you know that I'm still here (with your vignette series, too).

The one thing that caught my eye during this part, besides the excitement of Lois and Clark working together again, and their self-denial of how much they missed each other with that hug, and the fact that Lois FIGURED IT OUT!!!!! (okay, maybe there wasn't just one thing), is that Lois keeps telling herself that if Clark really and truly still loved her he wouldn't have left. /Is there a smilie for strangling Lois until wisdom arrives?/

Oh, come on! YOU were dating Dan Scardino (i.e. rubbing it in Clark's face that you weren't interested in him as more than a friend), Lois! Do you not know how much that would've tortured him? You know how skittish the man is. How many times over the years has he almost hung up his cape and moved away, only to be brought to his senses by you? Clark may not have liked the man, but he knew that Dan wasn't evil (i.e. Lex Luthor) so he was giving you your space. Did you expect him to hang off your skirt until you realized what a great guy he is? Ha! Would you have wanted him if he had? Nah. It was his leaving and the hole his leaving left in your life that made you realize how much you cared. I love how nobody uses his desk (except Jimmy occasionally) and how everyone blames you for his absence!

Okay, I'm starting to argue with your characters as if they are real people. Perhaps I'm sicker than I thought. Can't wait to see how Clark's Vienna trip falls through so he can concentrate on Lois...er... the art theft investigation.