FDK: Arrival of Destiny (6/12) - 03/08/15 09:29 PM
Re: FDK: Arrival of Destiny (6/12) - 03/08/15 11:09 PM
Heeheehee! Oh it WOULD make sense that she would have a memory/fantasy that would cause that slip of the tongue for this version of Lois. I do wonder that he "list" is in this case, though. we know making love to Clark doesn't go on it. I'm pretty sure she doesn't mean the "list" shoe told Clark in canon.
Re: FDK: Arrival of Destiny (6/12) - 03/09/15 05:21 AM
Hmmmm. I'm beginning to wonder if Lois's memories and Lois's reality are starting to get mixed up, because of Clark's reaction to her drooling at his chest.
First of all, I'm betting it was longer than 30 seconds. 
CLARK: /to self/ Did Lois just check me out? I think she did. What does that mean? It means your fly is open, doofess. Nope, just double checked. Then what was she looking at? And WHY does she keep sighing like that?
Now, to the fun part of a single POV story, guessing what the non-POV person is actually wanting to say / thinking. 
My guess...
Clark: Lois... I... uh... haven't washed that glass.
She *did* grab the glass off the counter. Clean ones are usually kept in the cabinet.
Then, again, back to my original point before I got distracted by a naked chest... where was I?... um...
Huh?... what? Right.
Right! Did Lois actually kiss Clark on the neck when she woke up from her faint at Dr. Platt's?
From her dream...
What actually happened last night / that morning? I'm not sure Lois exactly knows. I know I don't!
Can't wait to see if Clark gets the nerve to spit out what he wanted to say in the next part.
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She was still staring at the blank bathroom door, lost in her memories, when it opened and Clark emerged, fully dressed, only thirty seconds later.
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She turned back and looked him up and down, sighing. He was so good-looking, so handsome, and his body was shaped in the most perfect way. Clark clearly noticed her reaction and looked down at his attire then back up at her, questioningly.
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A sudden dryness in the mouth had her licking her lips. "Uh, do you have anything to drink. I'm parched." She breezed around the room and noticed a glass on the counter. She picked it up and turned to the refrigerator.
"Lois …" he began, as she reached for the handle on the refrigerator. "I … uh," he continued. She glanced back to him, when he sounded nervous. What was he nervous about?
"What?" she questioned, frowning.
"Um, well," he stuttered as she opened the door.
"Lois …" he began, as she reached for the handle on the refrigerator. "I … uh," he continued. She glanced back to him, when he sounded nervous. What was he nervous about?
"What?" she questioned, frowning.
"Um, well," he stuttered as she opened the door.
My guess...Clark: Lois... I... uh... haven't washed that glass.
She *did* grab the glass off the counter. Clean ones are usually kept in the cabinet.
Then, again, back to my original point before I got distracted by a naked chest... where was I?... um...
Huh?... what? Right.Right! Did Lois actually kiss Clark on the neck when she woke up from her faint at Dr. Platt's?
From her dream...
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"It's only six. Why don't we try and get a few hours sleep. I'll come by for you at nine."
Suddenly there was something constricting her. Tight arms held her still, held her close. She burrowed her face into the chest holding her closely. There was no worry, no fear. Even though she couldn't move she was safe. She squeezed her arms up and snaked them round his neck. Burrowing higher with her face she came upon his neck.
His arms tightened around her, if that were even possible.
Giving in to all the sensations raging through her body she parted her lips and tasted the skin at the junction of his neck and shoulder. Moving higher she found his earlobe and began to nibble.
Suddenly there was something constricting her. Tight arms held her still, held her close. She burrowed her face into the chest holding her closely. There was no worry, no fear. Even though she couldn't move she was safe. She squeezed her arms up and snaked them round his neck. Burrowing higher with her face she came upon his neck.
His arms tightened around her, if that were even possible.
Giving in to all the sensations raging through her body she parted her lips and tasted the skin at the junction of his neck and shoulder. Moving higher she found his earlobe and began to nibble.
Can't wait to see if Clark gets the nerve to spit out what he wanted to say in the next part.
Re: FDK: Arrival of Destiny (6/12) - 03/09/15 05:38 AM
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But she knew if she opened her eyes and looked to the side then her bed would be empty. He wouldn't be there.
Over the years she'd dreamed of Clark, on occasion. Never before had it been so vivid. The dreams usually felt ethereal, emotional. On extremely rare occasions she dreamed, what she presumed, were real events that had happened to OL, but they never lasted long, or revealed any pertinent information.
But this one…
Her heart was still racing and she felt … unfulfilled.
Over the years she'd dreamed of Clark, on occasion. Never before had it been so vivid. The dreams usually felt ethereal, emotional. On extremely rare occasions she dreamed, what she presumed, were real events that had happened to OL, but they never lasted long, or revealed any pertinent information.
But this one…
Her heart was still racing and she felt … unfulfilled.
Mmmmmmmm.....that was a yummy dream! And then, with that already in her head, to add the towel scene...oh, so cruel!
/groobie has a thought...someone needs to write a story where the knot on that towel isn't as secure as Clark seems to think it is!
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"What's not fair?"
"That you can eat like an eight-year-old but look like Mr. Hardbody."
"That you can eat like an eight-year-old but look like Mr. Hardbody."
Other things that aren't fair: that Clark only has eyes for Lois, that everyone else in the world has forever been denied their chance at getting Mr. Superman in the sack, that Clark's morals are a little less flexible than Barry's.
Susan, who is going back to work on her TOVOM nfic sequel...what with reading this and DC's Seeds of Doubt, Barry's going to see some action tonight!
Re: FDK: Arrival of Destiny (6/12) - 03/09/15 05:51 AM
Originally Posted by groobie
/groobie has a thought...someone needs to write a story where the knot on that towel isn't as secure as Clark seems to think it is!
Re: FDK: Arrival of Destiny (6/12) - 03/09/15 06:58 AM
Second that, Virginia 
. Go, Groobie, Go! 
That was some dream, KK
. And like Susan mentioned, followed by the lovely 'view' that greets Lois at the Apollo the next morning. How great of timing was that? .
The stumbling blocks that the regular 'Lois' from canon has to deal with--her past (family, relationships)--are such a road block between how she feels and how she acts with Clark. Your Lois--knowing how she feels and what she ultimately wants with Clark right from the get-go meeting him--are so different/refreshing. She has so much knowledge and power right in front of her--but because of that, her stumbling blocks are trying to decide how to act, how to feel, how to be herself. How to not give too much away.
What I'm trying to get across is that the premise is really different, but really effective in your story--if that makes sense? It really works well. It's unique--and being along for Lois' internal struggles throughout this process is amazing. I'm really impressed, KK
Fast-forwarding in my mind to other 'big' moments in the Pilot, and excited to see where you go.
Can't wait for more
Laura
. Go, Groobie, Go! That was some dream, KK
. And like Susan mentioned, followed by the lovely 'view' that greets Lois at the Apollo the next morning. How great of timing was that? . The stumbling blocks that the regular 'Lois' from canon has to deal with--her past (family, relationships)--are such a road block between how she feels and how she acts with Clark. Your Lois--knowing how she feels and what she ultimately wants with Clark right from the get-go meeting him--are so different/refreshing. She has so much knowledge and power right in front of her--but because of that, her stumbling blocks are trying to decide how to act, how to feel, how to be herself. How to not give too much away.
What I'm trying to get across is that the premise is really different, but really effective in your story--if that makes sense? It really works well. It's unique--and being along for Lois' internal struggles throughout this process is amazing. I'm really impressed, KK
Fast-forwarding in my mind to other 'big' moments in the Pilot, and excited to see where you go.
Can't wait for more
Laura
Re: FDK: Arrival of Destiny (6/12) - 03/09/15 09:15 PM
Talk about raging hormones... Poor Lois, this whole situation must be nerve wrecking! Actually it's kinda interesting, because in the fanfics usually Clark is the one struggling to keep his instincts under control 
Forget heat vision, flying and all the stuff... The ability to convey all these things with a single smile is the real super power!
But I think I'm missing something here: can somebody explain me what Lois' list is about?
Poor Lois, this whole situation must be nerve wrecking! Actually it's kinda interesting, because in the fanfics usually Clark is the one struggling to keep his instincts under control Quote
It was a combination of cute, shy, little boy and sexy, confident, virile … man.
But I think I'm missing something here: can somebody explain me what Lois' list is about?
Re: FDK: Arrival of Destiny (6/12) - 03/13/15 03:14 PM
I was away from a computer for a while so I didn't get to read this when it was posted. I've been able to read it now though and I enjoyed it. I'm looking forward to the next part.
Re: FDK: Arrival of Destiny (6/12) - 03/15/15 06:37 PM
Originally Posted by Christina
Heeheehee! Oh it WOULD make sense that she would have a memory/fantasy that would cause that slip of the tongue for this version of Lois. I do wonder that he "list" is in this case, though. we know making love to Clark doesn't go on it. I'm pretty sure she doesn't mean the "list" shoe told Clark in canon.
Originally Posted by VirginiaR
Hmmmm. I'm beginning to wonder if Lois's memories and Lois's reality are starting to get mixed up, because of Clark's reaction to her drooling at his chest.
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She was still staring at the blank bathroom door, lost in her memories, when it opened and Clark emerged, fully dressed, only thirty seconds later.
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She turned back and looked him up and down, sighing. He was so good-looking, so handsome, and his body was shaped in the most perfect way. Clark clearly noticed her reaction and looked down at his attire then back up at her, questioningly.
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Now, to the fun part of a single POV story, guessing what the non-POV person is actually wanting to say / thinking. My guess...
Clark: Lois... I... uh... haven't washed that glass.
She *did* grab the glass off the counter. Clean ones are usually kept in the cabinet.
Then, again, back to my original point before I got distracted by a naked chest... where was I?... um... Huh?... what? Right.
My guess...Clark: Lois... I... uh... haven't washed that glass.
She *did* grab the glass off the counter. Clean ones are usually kept in the cabinet.
Then, again, back to my original point before I got distracted by a naked chest... where was I?... um...
Huh?... what? Right.Quote
Right! Did Lois actually kiss Clark on the neck when she woke up from her faint at Dr. Platt's?
Originally Posted by groobie
Mmmmmmmm.....that was a yummy dream! And then, with that already in her head, to add the towel scene...oh, so cruel!
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/groobie has a thought...someone needs to write a story where the knot on that towel isn't as secure as Clark seems to think it is!
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Other things that aren't fair: that Clark only has eyes for Lois,
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that everyone else in the world has forever been denied their chance at getting Mr. Superman in the sack, that Clark's morals are a little less flexible than Barry's.
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Susan, who is going back to work on her TOVOM nfic sequel...what with reading this and DC's Seeds of Doubt, Barry's going to see some action tonight!
Originally Posted by LMA
That was some dream, KK . And like Susan mentioned, followed by the lovely 'view' that greets Lois at the Apollo the next morning. How great of timing was that? .
. And like Susan mentioned, followed by the lovely 'view' that greets Lois at the Apollo the next morning. How great of timing was that? .Quote
The stumbling blocks that the regular 'Lois' from canon has to deal with--her past (family, relationships)--are such a road block between how she feels and how she acts with Clark. Your Lois--knowing how she feels and what she ultimately wants with Clark right from the get-go meeting him--are so different/refreshing. She has so much knowledge and power right in front of her--but because of that, her stumbling blocks are trying to decide how to act, how to feel, how to be herself. How to not give too much away.
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What I'm trying to get across is that the premise is really different, but really effective in your story--if that makes sense? It really works well. It's unique--and being along for Lois' internal struggles throughout this process is amazing. I'm really impressed, KK
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Fast-forwarding in my mind to other 'big' moments in the Pilot, and excited to see where you go.
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Can't wait for more
Laura
Laura
Originally Posted by HiddenMoon
Talk about raging hormones... Poor Lois, this whole situation must be nerve wrecking! Actually it's kinda interesting, because in the fanfics usually Clark is the one struggling to keep his instincts under control
Poor Lois, this whole situation must be nerve wrecking! Actually it's kinda interesting, because in the fanfics usually Clark is the one struggling to keep his instincts under control yes.Quote
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It was a combination of cute, shy, little boy and sexy, confident, virile … man.
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But I think I'm missing something here: can somebody explain me what Lois' list is about?
Originally Posted by Lady Loisette
I was away from a computer for a while so I didn't get to read this when it was posted. I've been able to read it now though and I enjoyed it. I'm looking forward to the next part.