I was online when you were posting this and was on the edge of my seat at the end of part one! So so beautiful, and I love the pictures

Thank you for sharing

Hopeless chocoholic

wendy, your story is so wonderful and you posted part 2 just in that moment, I finnished reading part 1

petra

Wow. I'm in awe of how completely marvelous this story was, Wendy.

The first person perspective you used was perfect for this, and you portrayed both Lois and Clark so believably. I loved every word.

What's next?

Vicki (who has a birthday coming up in June, so start planning now... )

Awww... nice. As much as I wanted to bang their heads together, their doubts and worries and emotional cowardice were very much in character for both of them. Thanks for putting them out of my misery

And I was very impressed at your use of first-person all the way through. Very well done.

PJ

Aww, what a wonderful story! If there's ever a need for a melting goo smilie, this is it. I love the introspection and how both of them wanted to go after the other. And the ending! *melt*

Awwww! Very Very Cute. I loved the internal emotional arguments they were having with themselves and the revelation at the end. Well done.

Melisa

Awwww, Wendy, that was so sweet and wonderful!!! They're both so cute when they're cowards.


Jill

Awww!!

Wonderful, Wendy!!!

Loved all the internal battles, each wanting more from the other and so afraid to be the first to burst the friendship bubble!


Loved the kisses and the blissful blanks in memory!

It was perfect the way you ended it also -- quiet happy revelation...

Fantastic!!!!


Missy (still in waffy puddle of goo and who is rethinking her vote for EvilWendy)

Hi,

Great story.

Wendy,
wonderful, beautiful, sweet

merry

Gasp! Choke! AcK! (THUD)

Tank (who is diabetic and can only take so much sugary sweetness)

/me gives Tank a shot of insulin (with DocJill's guidance) and forces him to read Wendy's story again.... slowly!

Missy

I'm diabetic too, but I handled it just fine.

Great story!

Wendy,

Wow, I love it. Smoochies, revelations, wonderful pictures . I love the line that Jill quoted! So, so, so great!

- Alicia

AWWWWWWWWWWWW! ). And just so, so, WAFFY!

I enjoyed the alternating first person -- it really let us inside their heads. That's a very difficult perspective to do effectively, but you certainly did!

Thank you for this beautiful fic!

Absolutely wonderful! I adored it. Normally I'm not a fan of first person narrative, but I think this was one of those rare stories that was better because of it. I don't think that without the first-person narrative we would have been able to truly understand how nervous and torn both of them were. I felt so bad for Clark when he was sitting outside, unable to work up the energy to walk away. And I was so happy for them when they finally made it inside together.

It was great, Wendy. I loved it.

Annie

Aw Wendy that was sweeter then a Flake! And so are you<g> What a sweet beautiful little story. Ah if the feeling of a first kiss could be verbalized, I think this little story would do it justice. Laura

Wendy

WOW! WOW!

Tricia

So am I a diabetic - and I loved it! Why don't we form a diabetic FoLCs mini-group? That way we can have mutual support when such sweet fics come out... LOL

Good work, and please write something (long or short, sweet or angsty, I don't care!) soon...

Melisma (going back to re-read this, here under her Rock - that's how much she loved it)

Awww! Very nice! No A-plot, nice kisses, lots of WAFFs. What more can anyone ask for?

Irene

Wonderful... Can't think coherently yet, am too busy melting into a puddle of waffy goo.

I really enjoyed the style of the story too, the way it was told entirely from POV and we got to see *both* sides.

Loved the ending too, that just finished me completely - there is now a big puddle-of-goo stain in the computing lab!

Loriel

This was a wonderful read! I loved both perspectives, I loved the self-doubt, the internal monologues, the sweetness and I just adored the happy ending. Thank you!!!!

I adored it! From first line to finish. It was so bittersweet at first, when they both wished for more but wouldn't take that final step. I wanted to hug my poor boy (okay, no comment on me *always* wanting to do that :p ) when he kicked himself for standing outside Lois's apartment and itching to go back and grab her and kiss her senseless.

And then they met on the steps, both driven by the same need. Sniffle. There was a moment when I literally felt that time stopped: when Lois took his hand and reached up to kiss him for the first time. It was very sensual without hinting at anything more than tentative: very romantic.

And the revelation was just perfect, too!

Kaethel

What can I say that hasn't already been said!?

*waffy sigh*

OMG!

Everyone has said what makes this story special. I was thinking when I started the story that not many are written in first person and it must be harder to do. You did it beautifully!

This story is about the most difficult part of any relationship, being vulnerable. I admired Lois when she acknowledged that, after slapping Clark down twice, she needed to make the first move.

Sighhh!

I've loved this song since it first came out on Days of Our Lives, but it fits Lois and Clark even better.

Thank you, Wendy, for writing this with great pictures. Lois and Clark will always be the best Friends and Lovers!

Late again, but...ohhhhhhhh, Wendy, this was beautiful. Bittersweet (thanks, H! <g>), poignant, waffy and the first person narrative throughout was perfect, as others have already noted.

Absolutely superb!

LabRat (sighing happily as she wafts off in a haze of smoochies...)

Hey Wendy

I don't really have anything else to add. I have a soft spot for first-person pov, and I loved the way you wrote this one. Thanks so much for sharing this with us!

Enjoyed every word

Tracey

Wendy, I read this very soon after you posted, but I just haven't had a chance before now to get back to comment on it.

And so now I pretty much have to say ditto to what everyone else (except Tank) has said. I think the first person POV back and forth worked really well, with each of them sharing the same fears and doubts and concerns and you just wanted to call out to both of them "just do it!". In fact, I know I said that to each of them at least once while reading the story - and Lois listened! I love that Lois recognized that she was the one who needed to make the move, and that she followed through.

And the emotions of the moment - when they did finally kiss - were just beautiful. Everything that had built up to this was worth it.

And such a lovely revelation! As a writer, Clark obviously remembered learning "show, don't tell" - much more effective than words in this case. I'm so glad Lois didn't get mad.

Such a tremendously waffy story, Wendy. Thanks so much for sharing it with us.

KathyM

This was so sweet and waffy, Wendy, I tremendously enjoyed it. The pictures really helped too...

I can't say much more then what has been said by others. Just wonderfull, really. SO bring us more of your stories!

Saskia (eagerly awaiting more WLMC )

Sorry for being so late to comment.

GREAT STORY!!

What more can I say??

I liked the way Lois and Clark were thinking... it made me laugh several times. And yet, it was very realistic - does anybody doubt it??

A friendly advice:
Don't listen to any diabetics! It's true that romantic stuff sometimes gets just too boring or even disgusting, but this was just as sweet as it can be, and yet not boring or disgusting at all!

Great work!

CONGRATULATIONS!

Anna_B.

P.S.:
Ha, ha, my birthday's on Saturday!!

This was just great, as usual Wendy. I loved the revelation. I don't usually take to POV fiction, but you did it well and had very nice transitions.

O.K., the discussion on the list got me to get my butt in gear here.
Artemis

Hi everyone.

I don't know what to say. I'm speechless!

Trenna, I am delighted that you enjoyed the story. If it even gave you a fraction of the pleasure that your music videos continue to give to all of us, then I'm very happy. You are a terrific FoLC!

Wonderful WAFF. Thanks. I'm hoping someday to write half as clearly and detailed as you do.

I just seem to be following you around here. First the Nan story I had never read and now a Wendy story that I read so long ago that I had almost forgotten about. Keep it up Shallowford! I loved the older stories before dark became the norm.

Mike

Yeah. I've deliberately been cruising through the older pages during lunch lately. I realized that there were a lot of stories that weren't on the archive and almost seven years of the Fanfic TOC isn't searchable.

I've debated putting a link to the TOC page when posting on older stories so that would be searchable and anyone interested could follow the new link. Does that make sense, or would it be annoying, particularly for stories on the Archive?

I'd like to see links to the TOCs of these older stories when readers give FDK. I see the FDK and wonder where the story is.

There are a large number of stories here that never were archived (the author had to compile them and send them to LabRat). The two you mentioned recently were in the archive. I actually also find a large number of old stories in the archive but the original postings in the boards (if there ever were any) are not available due to board upgrades losing stories, posting to other sites that have been taken down, etc. I always wonder what the FDK was like for some of the older stories (1998-2002 era).

Thanks for pulling these up and getting me back where I started (the archives).

Mike