FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/02/12 12:55 AM
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/02/12 01:43 AM
Whoops. This was supposed to go on the prologue. 
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/02/12 04:53 AM
Very interesting story, Virginia.
Looking forward to the next part.
Looking forward to the next part.
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/02/12 09:02 AM
Mouserocks: That happens! No harm, no foul. 
If you make it past this part, you can weather anything I throw your way. If my Betas haven't killed me yet... although I did get a 
recently, I better get that last part finished ... it can't be that bad, right? Thank you for your comments.
If you make it past this part, you can weather anything I throw your way. If my Betas haven't killed me yet... although I did get a recently, I better get that last part finished ... it can't be that bad, right? Thank you for your comments.
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/02/12 02:45 PM
Well it seems like a fine mess you are weaving for them. I am looking forward to how you get them all out of it. Laura
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/02/12 06:14 PM
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Well it seems like a fine mess you are weaving for them. I am looking forward to how you get them all out of it. Laura
Well it seems like a fine mess you are weaving for them. I am looking forward to how you get them all out of it. Laura
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/02/12 06:32 PM
Looks like an intriguing set up. Can't wait to see how you develop it.
Joan
Joan
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/02/12 09:30 PM
WHAT? CLARK IS DEAD IN THE FIRST CHAPTER? WHAT?
(sorry about the all-caps. I just had to vent.)
The scary thing is that now Lois doesn't remember him! It's going to be difficult to get out of this pickle.
Looking forward to more.
(sorry about the all-caps. I just had to vent.)
The scary thing is that now Lois doesn't remember him! It's going to be difficult to get out of this pickle.
Looking forward to more.
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/02/12 11:36 PM
Thanks, Joan. Sometimes when I look at this opening Part it reminds me of one of those 'how are they going to get out of this one?' challenges of Tank's. There's a reason I chose to quote Jor-El for my quote. 
IolantheAlias, remember this isn't canon Clark. Canon Clark is fine and disappearing on Lois and making fun of Dan back in his own dimension. And this isn't alt-Clark, who... well... who knows what alt-Clark is doing with Lana in 1995? This is a new dimension of Tempus's making, based on canon dimension. How is Lois going to get out of this pickle? Well, duh! She's Lois Lane - the original Miss Pickles and Mustard - she can get out of anything. (/pst. I'm writing as fast as I can... 
24 is already 21 double spaced pages long and I haven't gotten to the end yet... I'd hate to make it 25 parts - and split this part in half - so it just might end up being a doozy of part or I'll have to have to ask my Betas what I should cut... 
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IolantheAlias, remember this isn't canon Clark. Canon Clark is fine and disappearing on Lois and making fun of Dan back in his own dimension. And this isn't alt-Clark, who... well... who knows what alt-Clark is doing with Lana in 1995? This is a new dimension of Tempus's making, based on canon dimension. How is Lois going to get out of this pickle? Well, duh! She's Lois Lane - the original Miss Pickles and Mustard - she can get out of anything.
(/pst. I'm writing as fast as I can... 24 is already 21 double spaced pages long and I haven't gotten to the end yet... I'd hate to make it 25 parts - and split this part in half - so it just might end up being a doozy of part or I'll have to have to ask my Betas what I should cut... /)
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/03/12 01:47 AM
Catching up now. Officially.
Go, Lois!
So sad. The way you bounced between those emotions- the hope that springs in both Martha and Lois' chests, back down to the heartwrenching reality of Jonathan's words... So depressing and painful. In a way, I hate that I can keep reading this.
Now Back to the Future logic I can follow.
Smart choice. I only hope she will believe it in the Clark-less world she'll be returning to.
Good point. Otherwise, why bring Tempus back? As opposed to any other old stranger? (And if it was just a random pick of the draw, then I must say, Lois and Clark have *extremely* bad luck). There's gotta be something he knows, some sort of connection.
Surprise there. Just think- all it took was remiving the competition for the two of them to work things out.
To put it in terms of a dream actually makes a lot more sense. More sense than their real lives, anyway. And so sad the way she reflected on it. 
WHA...?
Sadly not.
Ha! A pairing I actually would have agreed to!
Oooh. You know, this could be fun, in a sort of twisted way. If Clark's voice was in her head, slowly helping her remember things. Sort of like Ivy, but different of course.
Yay! Cat's still here! There may be some fun ahead, yet!
/snickers/ Are you going to include that too? Or am I to expect it in the sequel? Or is that reaching?
No! Buy it, Lois! Please? Your dream man will thank you later!
NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! *Never* leave important things in plain sight! With your luck?! 
It'll disappear before you know it (oddly familiar, no?)
Great, great, great job! Full of intrigue and suspense and heartbreak... Even if I wanted to stop reading it, I couldn't- I'm hooked! Can't wait for more (though I might have to with my own schedule)!
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“What do you mean baby Clark is dead?” Lois screamed at H. G. Wells.
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She kicked the man in the stomach and then the crotch.
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His face froze and he murmured, “I feel funny.” Suddenly, Tempus seemed more a collection of atoms and less a solid mass. A breeze passed through Rocky Cove and Tempus disappeared.
So sad. The way you bounced between those emotions- the hope that springs in both Martha and Lois' chests, back down to the heartwrenching reality of Jonathan's words... So depressing and painful. In a way, I hate that I can keep reading this. Quote
“Time is like this line…” Wells picked up a stick and drew a line in the dirt. “Because Tempus changed history so drastically, at the point where Tempus, me, you, and Mr. Kent arrived in 1966 – or probably more precisely at the point in time where baby Clark died – our timeline split or shattered into two separate dimensions.”
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She pulled out a notebook and pen and started writing. She described who Clark Kent and Superman were and what had occurred that day briefly. She wrote her contact information at the Daily Planet down at the bottom of the page. Then she tore it out of the notebook and handed it to Wells.
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“What do you know about Tempus? His parents’ names? Where he came from? Anything?”
Wells shook his head softly.
“I refuse to believe that you of all people would bring someone from the future into the past without knowing something about them, doing some kind of background check.”
Wells shook his head softly.
“I refuse to believe that you of all people would bring someone from the future into the past without knowing something about them, doing some kind of background check.”
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It must have been that investigation she had been working on into the wee small hours of the morning had drained her of energy. Mayson Drake’s death.
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Which was why Mayson’s death had affected her so strongly. She would miss her one female friend, her best friend.
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Which was why Mayson’s death had affected her so strongly. She would miss her one female friend, her best friend.
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That had been one strange dream. She shook her head. It had seemed so clear, so vivid, so real. She had been in love with a man, a handsome man with dark hair and glasses, and muscular physique. Him, she could remember, his name, not so much. She remembered how he had taken her into his arms and floated them over the fence.
Lois thought about that one detail again. That didn’t make any sense. People don’t float. She shook her head. Anyway, her dream man had disappeared, literally. And there had been a baby. Their baby? The baby had dark hair, so it could have been. But the baby died too.
Her chest ached at the thought of her baby dying. She wished she could remember the baby’s name. She had never wanted children before, never considered it a possibility. But this baby… she pined for this baby in a way she had never longed for anything in her life before.
Lois thought about that one detail again. That didn’t make any sense. People don’t float. She shook her head. Anyway, her dream man had disappeared, literally. And there had been a baby. Their baby? The baby had dark hair, so it could have been. But the baby died too.
Her chest ached at the thought of her baby dying. She wished she could remember the baby’s name. She had never wanted children before, never considered it a possibility. But this baby… she pined for this baby in a way she had never longed for anything in her life before.
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That was what most men she met did, with the exception of Lex. Lex had always been honest with her, which was why Lois Lane hardly ever dated anymore.
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Men like that just didn’t exist, at least not in this universe
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Dan Scardino was interested in her, but she wasn’t sure about him. He seemed more Mayson’s type.
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Didn’t you get him checked suspenders last year? a man’s seductive, somewhat hesitant, voice asked inside her head.
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It looked like Cat Grant. Oooh. That would make her day.
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She smiled appreciatively and then took a closer look at the red mark on his arm. “Wow, that must be some itch.”
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Lois didn’t remember writing the note. She had no idea who Clark Kent was nor who, or what, Tempus was. H. G. Wells? The author? The very dead author? Please! What kind of crap was this, Lane? Notes for a novel?
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She shrugged and tossed the paper haphazardly onto her desk.
It'll disappear before you know it (oddly familiar, no?)Great, great, great job! Full of intrigue and suspense and heartbreak... Even if I wanted to stop reading it, I couldn't- I'm hooked! Can't wait for more (though I might have to with my own schedule)!
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/03/12 10:02 AM
Ooooh! I didn't scare Mouserocks off after all. 
(science for humanities majors?)
One would hope.
Well, they are both strong career types battling it out in male dominated fields. I can see them forging a friendship from that (us vs. them). Adding Clark into the equation makes the relationship more adversial.
S2 continues where it left off after Tempus Fugitive...
Thank you. Posting more tonight at midnight (my time). Speaking of which, time to go prep the next part.
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Smart choice. I only hope she will believe it in the Clark-less world she'll be returning to.
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Good point. Otherwise, why bring Tempus back? As opposed to any other old stranger? (And if it was just a random pick of the draw, then I must say, Lois and Clark have *extremely* bad luck). There's gotta be something he knows, some sort of connection.
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Surprise there. Just think- all it took was remiving the competition for the two of them to work things out.
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That was what most men she met did, with the exception of Lex. Lex had always been honest with her, which was why Lois Lane hardly ever dated anymore.
WHA...?
WHA...?
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/snickers/ Are you going to include that too? Or am I to expect it in the sequel? Or is that reaching?
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Great, great, great job! Full of intrigue and suspense and heartbreak... Even if I wanted to stop reading it, I couldn't- I'm hooked! Can't wait for more
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/04/12 02:16 PM
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“What do you mean baby Clark is dead?” Lois screamed at H. G. Wells.
And you *killed* a *baby*? Sick. Very sick sense of humor. /starts body count: 1 (Alt-Lois doesn’t count)Quote
“You killed him, you sick deviant of a man! Who kills a baby?!”
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She kicked the man in the stomach and then the crotch.
Michael
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/04/12 05:23 PM
Micahel: 
sensitive keyboard of new laptop>> Now, where was I?
Some men really do have committment issues.
<<whistling innocently>>
Oooh. I don't think I've read that one. Which one is that? <<rubs hands for more procrastination reading>>
He's stuck in the future.
Oh, dear. Is Michael eyeing the long line at the roller coaster? <<bats eyelashes>> please 
give my story a chance. Two Betas begging for the last part can't be a bad thing, right?
Thanks for the chuckles.
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BC: 2
Some men really do have committment issues.Quote
I just realized: How are they going to survive Nightfall? Or will the nukes actually work?
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Well, there’s MLT’s explanation…
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Then how will HG Wells get back home?
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He appeared kind and kind of friendly?
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/eyes Part 2 with suspicion/
give my story a chance. Two Betas begging for the last part can't be a bad thing, right?Thanks for the chuckles.
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/05/12 11:36 AM
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Don't be surprised if you lose count by the end.
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Some men really do have committment issues.
Michael
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/05/12 02:33 PM
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There's No Place Like Home. I do remember correctly that you mentioned reading it, right?
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What about the remaining novels? And the changed history 'H.G. Wells went missing in 1913'.
)The Time Machine was published in 1895, so it's interesting that it is almost 20 years after that he's going into the future. Well, thanks. I'll be sure keep that in mind for the future. As to what happened to H.G. Wells's past. Well, as I explained in this part, this new alt-canon-dimension doesn't really have a past of its own before shortly before dusk on May 17, 1966, when Tempus died. This dimension is an off shoot (hence the "Y" analogy) from canon dimension. Therefore, it will share a past with canon dimension, until that time when they can resurrect (reconnect the dots, repeat, darn, what is the word I'm thinking of? reconstruct!) the events that cause Tempus from not being erased from time. When they figure out how to save Tempus, they will unshatter time, and make their "Y" dimension to canon dimension into an "X" dimension with canon dimension.
someone just covered my mouth with spoilage tape! I hope said closure (the ending) worked for them or I'll have to go an rework it. Feel free to return your ticket at any time, if you think my roller coaster will make you hurl. :p I knew this story wouldn't be for everyone when I wrote it, but sometimes stories dictate taking the road with the scary fog and omnious shadows before one can reach the sunshine, butterflies, and flowers.
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/05/12 04:09 PM
Virginia,
I'm relieved.
We are taking radically different paths. No one can say we collaborated.
I'm relieved.
We are taking radically different paths. No one can say we collaborated.
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/05/12 04:13 PM
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We are taking radically different paths. No one can say we collaborated.
We are taking radically different paths. No one can say we collaborated.
But, no, I don't think our stories will be tiptoeing along the same path.
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/05/12 06:10 PM
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What about the remaining novels? And the changed history 'H.G. Wells went missing in 1913'.
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/05/12 11:25 PM
Okay, some of you might notice that the part totals differ between this Part and the FDK for this Part, that's because Part 24 ending up being WAY too long, like 40 double spaced pages (twice the length of some of my lengthy Parts), so my Betas and I decided to extend your reading pleasure by chopping in half to give you two more days to chew off your fingernails.
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/06/12 12:14 PM
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I apologize to any physicists who don't like the way I'm playing with time.
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<<whistling innocently>> I have no idea what you're talking about.
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Now, Michael, aren't you the man who's always insisting that I not give away any spoilers in my FDK comments feedback.
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During the course time of my story Lois will meet a lot of scummy [...], Lois does not engage in any non-consensual sex during the course (timeline) of my Another Lois story.
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someone just covered my mouth with spoilage tape!
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Feel free to return your ticket at any time, if you think my roller coaster will make you hurl.
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I knew this story wouldn't be for everyone when I wrote it,
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Okay, some of you might notice that the part totals differ between this Part and the FDK for this Part
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so my Betas and I decided to extend your reading pleasure by chopping in half to give you two more days to chew off your fingernails.
Michael
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/06/12 12:32 PM
Ooooh! Sheldon! I love Sheldon!
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/06/12 12:53 PM
Michael
PS: Is such a post considered gratuitous?
Re: FDK - Another Lois (1/24) - 04/06/12 01:04 PM
</font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by Darth Michael:
<strong> Thank you.
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Thank you.