FDK Fallout 1/2 - 06/21/11 04:04 AM
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Maybe Superman had actually been in the courtroom, and maybe he had, in the quickest of motions, stopped the bullet with his hand, and perhaps it had just ricocheted and hit the gunman instead.
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As she fastened the skirt around her middle, she was dismayed to find that it felt snug.
I can't imagine this all getting tied up in one more part... there's a longer story here and I encourage you to write it. Not to make your life harder, but I'd like to see this story stretched out a bit--like show us exactly the circumstances that led up to L&C sleeping together, especially with Clark having amnesia...And I'd like to know why Lois is bothering with Lex at all since she slept with Clark--I don't know... I just think you got a good thing here and could go deeper! And if you need a beta-reader, I'm available!
Errata (you asked for it ) If you ask, I can't help but notice... if you don't mention it, then I can usually skip over them. :rolleyes:
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Superman, Earth’s one last hope, we [was]nowhere to be found.
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And one thing [had] led to another and before long, the were lying next to each other in his bed.
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What are the odds than [that] another gunman will take up the job tomorrow?