FDK: Battle Scars (9/9) - Lois & Clark Fanfic Message Boards

If you are still reading, I'd love some feedback on the chapter and on the story as a whole.

That was a sweet ending to the story. Laura

Aww love the ending.

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Originally posted by Laurach:
That was a sweet ending to the story. Laura

Thanks so much!

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Originally posted by jackiek:
Aww love the ending.

Thanks!

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"Clark," Lois said, cupping her hand beneath his chin to raise his head, forcing him to look at her. "If General Zod had killed you, everyone on New Krypton would have suffered and died under Nor's rule."

Plus, Zod would have come to Earth, and we all know how well *that* would have worked out.

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"And now...you've lived what they are going through, worse even. I think they'll recognize that aspect of you, even if they don't know why."

This is a really good comment and very true. People no doubt think, "Superman! He has all those powers - he can't possibly know how I feel." But as Lois says, what he went through on New Krypton will come out in his interactions, somehow.

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"Clark, every experience that we live through helps to shape who we are. We all have to choose whether our experiences will destroy us or if they will strengthen us. What will you decide?" There was a mild note of challenge and defiance in her voice.

Very true and not just for Superman, for everyone. And it's very in-character for Lois to challenge Clark with that right now. She created Superman and she'll keep him going. (And then, other times, she'll need a kind word or a challenge, and Clark will be there for her.)

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Clark snorted in mock indignation. "I think I can manage. Who are we playing?"

I'm a little confused by this. Are you saying that Clark is going to manage the softball team (i.e, be the non-playing field manager) or that he finds himself able to hit a baseball, so he will be playing on the team?

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A blonde little girl of four years looked up at him with fear-filled green eyes. As she registered the suit he was wearing, she stood and stepped into his arms.

Because she recognizes Superman from the Suit and knows that Superman is a good guy.

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Plus, Zod would have come to Earth, and we all know how well *that* would have worked out.

Chaos, mayhem, death and destruction. And then his work would have been done.

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This is a really good comment and very true. People no doubt think, "Superman! He has all those powers - he can't possibly know how I feel." But as Lois says, what he went through on New Krypton will come out in his interactions, somehow.

Exactly! He's kind of better equipped to help them now. And yeah, who wouldn't think that he leads a charmed life with all of those powers.

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Very true and not just for Superman, for everyone. And it's very in-character for Lois to challenge Clark with that right now. She created Superman and she'll keep him going. (And then, other times, she'll need a kind word or a challenge, and Clark will be there for her.)

That's one of the many really beautiful things about their relationship, isn't it? I actually almost went with the "what doesn't kill us makes us stronger" cliche, but I realized that Clark DID need Lois to challenge him.

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I'm a little confused by this. Are you saying that Clark is going to manage the softball team (i.e, be the non-playing field manager) or that he finds himself able to hit a baseball, so he will be playing on the team?

He's going to be playing on the team. I meant it as "I think I can manage to hit a ball." I may need to reword that before sending it to the archive.

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Because she recognizes Superman from the Suit and knows that Superman is a good guy.

Metropolis children are taught to trust police officers, firemen, and Superman.

Very nice ending! I wasn't sure at first when I saw you were ending with a little girl and Superman rather than Lois and Clark, but it turned out to be just the perfect touch. Exactly what he needed!

I also liked the nice touch of planning to surprise Jimmy with Clark's return to work--small, but very sweet.

Great story!

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Very nice ending! I wasn't sure at first when I saw you were ending with a little girl and Superman rather than Lois and Clark, but it turned out to be just the perfect touch. Exactly what he needed!

I had to be nice to Clark at the end and give him some healing. I put the poor guy through the mill in this fic. Glad you enjoyed the ending though. I know you've been waiting for this chapter.

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I also liked the nice touch of planning to surprise Jimmy with Clark's return to work--small, but very sweet.

Great story!

Thanks for picking up on some of the more subtle details! I can picture Jimmy's face right now....

Thanks for sticking with the story!