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Posted By: Deadly Chakram FDK: Battle Scars (8/9) - 06/12/11 12:36 PM
The conclusion is coming shortly!

So, too fast of a chapter? Too slow? Did the Elders cave too easily? jump

Discuss...
Posted By: IolantheAlias Re: FDK: Battle Scars (8/9) - 06/12/11 10:13 PM
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"There are less than a thousand of us left. New Krypton cannot afford to kill everyone who makes a mistake."
I think Kryptonians are doomed as a species. A thousand is too few for genetic diversity. I hope they've been taking tissue samples from everyone who died, so that hopefully some genetic diversity might be preserved.

And I liked the bit with the Elders. You showed their concerns. Clark probably earned some extra credit by standing up to Nor's torture.
Posted By: Deadly Chakram Re: FDK: Battle Scars (8/9) - 06/12/11 10:31 PM
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Originally posted by IolantheAlias:
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"There are less than a thousand of us left. New Krypton cannot afford to kill everyone who makes a mistake."
I think Kryptonians are doomed as a species. A thousand is too few for genetic diversity. I hope they've been taking tissue samples from everyone who died, so that hopefully some genetic diversity might be preserved.

And I liked the bit with the Elders. You showed their concerns. Clark probably earned some extra credit by standing up to Nor's torture.
They probably are doomed as a species unless they can mate with other species, like Lois and Clark would have children. So while they wouldn't be keeping the bloodlines pure, at least the bloodlines would continue. Probably wouldn't happen though - we saw how much of a scandal the idea of Clark and Lois was at his trial in the series. Too bad. Kryptonians are awesome.

Glad you liked the Elders bit. I was kind of worried it sounded a little rushed.
Posted By: AntiKryptonite Re: FDK: Battle Scars (8/9) - 06/13/11 12:11 AM
Loved this part, too! Realistically, I doubt the elders would change the law after such a short time of having changes thrust upon them. However, also realistically, Clark would never be able to fly, so...I think it worked out great! smile

I'd happy Ching and Zara have their happy ending now, but I'm eager to get back to Lois and Clark now.

And really, forty-three people dying in the entire course of a civil war is probably the most bloodless civil war ever.

One little thing I forgot to mention...the chain Lois gave him to hang her ring on is silver in the show. I don't know if you changed it for a reason, but I thought I'd mention it. Hope it helps.

Again, looking forward to the last part--I've really enjoyed this story!
Posted By: Deadly Chakram Re: FDK: Battle Scars (8/9) - 06/13/11 12:29 AM
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Loved this part, too! Realistically, I doubt the elders would change the law after such a short time of having changes thrust upon them. However, also realistically, Clark would never be able to fly, so...I think it worked out great!
Thanks. I'm still considering reworking this chapter to expand on the Elders letting Clark leave (Clark's pleas, not the behind the scenes discussion after they send him out of the room). Not sure though. Once Clark threatens them with no children, the Elders would be backed into a corner.

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I'd happy Ching and Zara have their happy ending now, but I'm eager to get back to Lois and Clark now.
Next part! Girl scout's oath! laugh

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And really, forty-three people dying in the entire course of a civil war is probably the most bloodless civil war ever.
True. I considered changing that as well. I just felt guilty about decimating the Kryptonian population that much. Yes, I realize they are fictional people, but I still felt bad about it!

/me needs help

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One little thing I forgot to mention...the chain Lois gave him to hang her ring on is silver in the show. I don't know if you changed it for a reason, but I thought I'd mention it. Hope it helps.
Oops! Total and utter brain fart on the chain color. Thanks for pointing that out. Maybe I should go back and rewatch the NK arc again.... devil

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Again, looking forward to the last part--I've really enjoyed this story!
Thanks! Glad you've enjoyed the ride so far! I hope I can live up to your expectations in the final chapter!
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