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Good part
Saori needs to realize that Clark's feelings for her is not real.
She better stick with her Prince.

Great setup, good background on all the characters, LOTS of characters to keep straight, but not much real plot development so far. That's OK, but I think everyone is just waiting to see where you are going with this one. I hope very much that you know where you are going with it. I love it so far and I am intrigued by the mystery of Clark's behavior. Is Lois going to be the one to figure out what makes him act that way? That would be an excellent use of her investigative skills, and could lead to the kind of waffy ending that makes us want to read a story over and over.

Yeah, it's all down to Lois. Shin's going to be writing that because he loves Lois doing B&E and all sorts of shady things. lol.

Aki's on A-plot and he wrote this part. I'm glad you liked it.

As for me, I'll be doing B-plot after the boys get their chapters down.

Thanks for commenting, guys!

Much love!

-- Sayo

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