FDK:The Walls Between Us-Part 8 - Lois & Clark Fanfic Message Boards

Hi,

Great part.

Quote

Glory smiled back. “Well, maybe not in soulmates. I believe that there are several people someone can love, but once they fall in love with one of them, everyone else is left behind, just as stories that could have happened but didn’t. When two people fall in love, love creates bonds between them, bonds that don’t break. If there’s anything that can bring two people apart, then they were never really in love. Not even if it’s someone else. *Especially* not if it’s someone else.”

Beautiful!

More ASAP, please.

MAF

Cute story, fast but cute. Laura

Anna!

well, that was Superfast (the delay between editing and posting, I mean)!

You already know what I think of your story, and I won't give spoilers but, like MAF, I can't wait to read Martha's explanation <g>.

oh, and again, you did great with that interview part

Keep writing,

Carole

Finally!!!

The interview was interesting and the woman knowing that CK and Lois are in love is fantastic

Quote

“I had just gone to buy some sandwiches,” he said, showing her the bag. He still couldn’t believe what he had just seen. He paused, then asked: “Were you guys really kissing?”

Lois tapped her fingers on the bench’s back, behind Clark’s body. What in the heck was Jimmy expecting to hear?

“No, we just saw you coming and thought we could play a little joke,” she said impatiently

An interesting twist to how Lois and Clark meet. It's nice to see Lois being the one who falls for Clark first, and a Clark who is more hesitant.

I was a bit confused about the timelines between parts 7 and 8. In part 7, Lois and Clark do "research" for two hours, then go get sandwiches. In part 8, they end up in the park kissing, then go "researching" again for 3 hours. When they get back to the Planet, Perry tells them they have an interview at 5 so they decide to kill time by going to lunch.

If they got to work at 8, spent an hour talking about what to do, 2 hours researching, it would be around 11 o'clock. They go for sandwiches (which I would consider lunch) and then to the park. That's probably another hour or so. Then three hours of more research puts them back to the Planet around 3 o'clock at the earliest. I was suprised they said they would go for lunch when it seemed they already had lunch, and only had about one and a half hours to kill before their interview.

I, too, was suprised Lois didn't feel the need to "talk" to Jimmy. I also like the fact that Lois isn't wanting to waste time with the relationship. It seems like something a person who "jumps in without checking the level" would do.

Thanks for the nice comments!

Quote

I was expecting Lois and Clark to go straight to Jimmy (the gossip) and grab him to a conference room for a little advice from Mad dog Lane.

Quote

I, too, was suprised Lois didn't feel the need to "talk" to Jimmy.

Hmm... I guess it didn't occur to me.

About the timeframes, Jeff, you're right. Culture thingy, more likely; here in Greece we have lunch at two or three, and that's the time we call 'noon'. After that, I put the interview at five, because a lot of things would happen next, but I somehow got messed up, as you noticed.
I'll keep that in mind and edit it once I'm done with the whole fic. In the meantime, just assume that they got to work at 6

Thanks again!
AnnaBtG.

Anna,
another good part
more
merry