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A few more loose ends are tied off...

Chris

Whoa. That was unexpected.

Poor Lois, with no air conditioning... I know how she feels; my husband's car was bought in Canada, and it doesn't even have any air to fix. He's been conditioned to drive everywhere with his windows down. Maybe that works in Ontario, but here in North Carolina... but, um, never mind me <g>

I could visualize everything here; great work.

PJ

Have I mentioned how much I love stories with well-thought-out A-Plots? Good part, and I'm looking forward to the next one.

BrightFeather

Okay, I'll bite. What happens next?

Not a lot of instalments left, that means that Katherine has to survive as the prime witness against Luthor. (Wasn't she the one who rolled over on Lex in HoL?) But there is no need for Saxon so I'd say he's toast.

Hopefully our duo can manage to get into a little more trouble before this is through. We wouldn't want things to go too easily for them.

Also, since the point was made for CJ's powers wearing off before everything was settled, that means that has to play a significant role in the big finale. Maybe Lois is gunned down after all, making things come full circle. After all, Lois was supposed to be murdered before Wells decided to meddle in the affairs of this alternate world.

Tank (who hopes Chris has enough parts left to fit all the whams she obviously needs to have before the finish)

Hi,

Great part.

Loved the tweakage, Chris! Absolutely perfect. Thanks for indulging a POVist.

Re the Miami Vice thing (and the Addams family here, too although I don't know what Psycho is), I didn't mean to imply there was something wrong! I never saw the show (not movie?) either, but as you say, it sinks into the general consciousness. And LnC is certainly the right age for it.

Regarding this section: Oh, my, did I do a double-take when Saxon's "significant other" made her appearance! I didn't recognize her from the description, but that's because (natch ) you do such a lovely job of describing OCs that I wasn't trying to match her to anyone I might know.

Why was CJ trying to be "discreet" about watching the window, the map, and Lois all at once? Seems like a perfectly natural thing to do.

I really enjoyed the A-plot bits with Saxon's explanations and his carefully documented proof. One little suggestion, though: since it's dialogue, and since Saxon is (as far as I know) American, he would say "review" rather than "revision." Of course, other Murcans might disagree.

I'm highly intrigued by the insinuation re what's happening in Arcadia. I can't wait to find out, so give us MORE!

Hazel

Chris

WOW! Excellent A-plot development!

I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.

Tricia

Chris
wonderful part
keep this coming quickly
merry

Pam: Hey, whaddya know? I managed to write a plot twist! Seriously, hope that was unexpected in a good way and didn't come too far out of left field.

BrightFeather: Thanks for the comment re the A plot! I love knowing that some people go for this kind of stuff!

Tank: Re Katherine -- probably / possibly. And, yes, the was the one who rolled over on Lex. As for Saxon... Why would I want to tell you who is going to die?

Oh, yeah, they'll get into more trouble.

Why can't people just accept that CJ hasn't got his powers and that's the end of that plot thread? It's done. Dusted. Finito.

Well, maybe not.

Darn! You mean that I need to run off and rewrite my ending into something different?

Seriously, that would be a fantastic ending, but it isn't the one I've come up with.

Maria: well, you did want to know what had happened to her, didn't you?

Hazel: thanks, as ever, for thoughtful insights. H'm. Would CJ be discreet at this stage of the relationship? I'm not sure, now that you've got me thinking about it; I wrote this before they crossed that intimacy threshold. I guess that's what happens when you write things out of order.

Thanks for the heads up on the review / revision thing, too.

Arcadia will have to wait... until at least next time.

Tricia and Merry, thanks for your comments, too.

Chris (who is impressed that you guys have had the stamina to stick with this one for so long. )

Oh, it was very cool <g> It makes sense, since they've been looking for her but she's dropped off the face of the earth, and Saxon was involved with Luthor, too, so it's not strange at all that they'd know each other... If she'd shown up as Henderson's long-lost sister or something, that would be weird <g> but in this context it's fine. And I'm impressed that you've actually made her likeable!

PJ

Oops, wrong comment folder. I moved it.

Have to say, I like this twist.

I can sympathize with Lois. The only thing our air conditioner here in the house is good for is running up the electric bill, and in Southern California, that's no joke. It was 94 here, yesterday.

Nan