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This was so good of making Lex sound even more evil than he was. He really got into his head. By the way love the song choice.

Woah! I read the story title, laughed a little at the memory of a great song... And then got a fic far darker than I'd imagined!

Wow. This piece is beautifully well crafted. You can really see Lex's narcissistic tendencies coming out to play. It also puts his actions into a better light. Because he does move too fast but the way you've painted it, he's not only aware it's too fast, but it's strategic. Bone chillingly good.

I'm brushing my arms with my hands to get the creepy off, but it's not working!

Yikes. That was some terrifying peek into Lex' demented mind and heart. Reading him think about trapping Lois, about pulling down her friends and her support system, driving a wedge between her and Clark, slowly and agonizingly taking Superman's life - ugh, now I have chills along with the creepy. As Mouserocks wrote, it's a dark story - and when you have both Mouse and me tell you it's dark, you'd best bring a searchlight.

More, DC! I want to read more of your stuff! With the lights on, of course.

Thank you! I've always felt that his pursuit of Lois was driven by more than just love/lust. There was an absolutely need to "dominate" and "win" as well.

As for the song - my car radio never leaves the local classic rock station, unless we are streaming Disney for the kids via Spotify. Total luck that this song played after I read the challenge.

Glad to surprise you, Mouse! You know my muse - she's pretty twisted and you never know exactly what she's going to throw at you. I suppose the song could have worked for Clark, but I got this really creepy/stalkery vibe from it when I heard it (for the first time in ages) and immediately knew it had to be a Lex fic.

So glad you liked it.

Haha! Not sure brushing off will be enough! After a shower I'm still feeling slimy from being in Lex's head.

I really do feel like his "courtship" of Lois was very systematic and planned down to the last detail. He was all about "winning" even if some of his reason for going after her was love/lust (and I've seen the notion of maybe Miranda hit him with the 100% and permanent Revenge spray).

I've got a few, less dark ideas floating around in my head. And one or two dark ones. I can promise a bit of dark twistiness in the later part of "A New Dawn" - my 3rd and final installment of my Batman/Superman series. That one is in with my beta at the moment, but hopefully won't be too long in coming after I'm done posting "Stepping Into The Light."

Thanks for reading. Your feedback made me laugh a nice evil laugh.

And the creepiest introspective award goes to Vicki! Stalker Lex is really coming out with this one. Kudos!

Haha, thanks! I enjoy creeping people out. What character better to do that with than Lex?

Nice introspective look into Lex’s twisted mind. It wouldn’t surprise me if Lois actually married him that he would’ve ended up being physically abusive to Lois since he already demonstrated that he could isolate Lois from everything he held near. Good here that Lex realises very quickly that his real rival was Clark and not Superman even when Lois didn’t realise who she truly wanted to begin with

Thank you! I can definitely see the potential for Lex to turn to physical abuse down the road. He does have the occasional rage issue - him yelling "What have you done to me?" at Dr. Gretchen Kelly when his hair is failing out comes to mind. And he was very quick and efficient in isolating Lois from her support network during their engagement.

I do think Lex is a very intelligent man who observes more than he lets on. He might not know that Clark is Superman, but he's smart enough to realize the hero would be likely unattainable, while the best friend is right there, always.

Thanks for reading this creepy little fic!

Wow. This is indeed a hair-raising plunge into our favorite psychopath.
This awesome vignette shows that this smooth villain, despite his elegance and outward class is the basest of human beings. Lois certainly escaped a fate worth than death...
Bravo!

Thanks so much! It took a while to really slip into his mind, but once I got in there, it was terrifying. I'm glad you called it hair-raising because his mind was seriously creeping even me out. He's definitely no better than a common street thug in some ways with his disregard for human life.

Thanks for reading!

Hi Vicki!
Funny thing happened. I really thought that this was Clark at first. Then I got confused before I realized that it was Superman. Only to remember, no, the blurb said ‘Lex Luthor’! Oops

LOIS: It tasted bitter, kind of like sucking on a piece of oak. Made it easy to not over-imbibe.

It’s adorable how he takes her and her profession so serious.

Wouldn’t it be funny if she already suspected a lot more and then splashed the interview and the truth both on the front page, together with incontrovertible evidence?

‘dismiss’ Great choice of words

*That’s* why he built the cage. And he could certainly combine Superman’s habitat with creating a habitat for her to willingly stay in. I mean, holding the virgin damsel hostage is a tried and true way to get the hero to do your bidding, isn’t it?

He reminds me of an Australian funnel-web spider.

He’s so charming A true paragon of virtue and chivalry

So, mixed into Big Belly Burger’s beef patties?

LOIS: I had no idea!

Things one gets for donating the city’s streetlight system.

Well, he does not sound entirely stable. Maybe he even has a couple of light psychopathic tendencies buried in there somewhere. They should definitely make an appointment with a relationship counselor, though, if they do go through with the marriage.

Creepy!

Michael

Well, Clark DID kinda do the creepy stalker thing when he was floating outside her window when he met her.


Lex: (executes the wine maker)


(Oblivious Lois defends how "supportive" he is of her.)


Now THAT would be a fun fic idea. Lois agrees to marry him just to get on the inside, on a sting operation only she knows about. All her fights with Clark hurt worse than the last but she can't tell him because she needs Lex to know the fights are "authentic" so as not to raise suspicions...


Lex: I'm the king and all you people are my willing servants.


Lex: Nigel, I'm going on this evening. Please ensure Lois is fed and watered, and take her out around midnight so she can do her business. Don't let her mess on the carpeting.


Good, because that's pretty much what I was envisioning too!



Nah. More like the "special" at Ralph's Pagoda.


Clark:


He's just a little creepy. Nothing to be concerned about.

Dr. Friskin: I'm not touching this with a 10,000 foot pole. (Nopes right out of the situation)

Hi Vicki!


Post-ARGH-Lois: Can I please lobotomize her? Maybe Cat’s personality? Something? Hello? He-llo? Anyone? A little help here!

There’s a fic about that: Dirty Bubbles by Zoomway


NIGEL: Very well, sir. I will also make sure she takes her rabies medication.
LEX (distracted): Yeah, yeah, on with it. /waves his fingers/



Michael