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I know. I know. The story was finished. They caught the killer and got hitched, but then this happened - probably because of the awesome feedback you posted.

Let me know what you think. Should it be the new epilogue or should I leave it as a stand-alone?

Thanks for reading.

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It definitely works great as a second epilogue! I recommend adding it to the end of the original story when you submit it to the Archive. (Assuming you haven't submitted it already, of course.) I think it ties things together well, with Wells explaining that while the AU L&C had lots of their own challenges, they won't have to deal with the other challenges that our L&C had to deal with. I especially got a kick out of all the green and red K in this universe being bundled up for them to get rid of. That is one heck of a wedding gift, LOL.

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If I didn't say so before, nice work BJ!


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Ooh! An epilogue! I love it. I didn't know I wanted this wrap up, but it's perfect. I love the little gifts, the inclusion of the red kryptonite was a good touch. I also like that you resolved some of the issues with Star. Very well done!


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I agree with KathyB and Mouse: This is an outstanding ending to your very interesting story. BJ, you have almost outdone yourself with this new epilogue. It ties together the few little threads you left unraveling in the breeze at the end of what is now the penultimate chapter. And it gives the readers a Warm And Fuzzy Feeling at the finish.

My Spidey-sense is hinting at a well-deserved Kerth nom next year!



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I agree with all of the above. Great ending to an incredible story. I vote to add it to the story as an epilogue. It fits in perfectly, and will make it easier for readers to find it in the Archives. Well done! clap


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Thank you to everyone that read the story and gave feedback. My special thanks goes to GooBoo for preparing the story for the archives.



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