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#269010 02/15/16 12:35 PM
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Very good clap clap clap!

I'm really impressed by how you chose these two scenes and merged them together. It really worked well.

Loved it notworthy...
Laura


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...two simple sentences--with so much meaning.

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Thanks, Laura. I'm glad you liked this little vignette.


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Very interesting vignette! But I want more! I'd love to see what Clark says/does whilst under Sunday's hypnosis. What if he uses his powers? Yikes!


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I agree with Deadly Chakram - what would happen if Clark used his powers while under hypnosis in front of a room full of people, including Lois? Would she jump on stage and pull him away, trying to cover for him? Would she and the audience think that whatever Clark is doing was just a magic trick, part of the act?


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Thanks for your feedback, groobie and Deadly Chakram. I agree that the ensuing scene has a lot potential and could be a fun read. But personally I wanted to allow your imagination to run wild with what might happen. I don't think I'd be capable of using this scene to its full potential.
But feel free to turn this into a challenge. I'd like to read what others can come up with.


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That would definitely be worth the price of admission!


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