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Just an ultra-short that came to me this morning.

Considering that I don't usually like next-gen stories, I seem to write my share of them.

My own suspicion is that if Lois is angry with her daughter, it wouldn't be because she was a few minutes late, it would be because she was flying in public when she clearly wasn't ready yet. (Not only couldn't she navigate, she flew in a *gown*. )

Frankly, the narrator strikes me as being a bit flighty.

What do you all think?

Joy,
Lynn

What a howl!

Sorry honey, Uncle Bernie won't be able to get you out of this one!

Yes!!! I really liked this one a lot, Lynn ...I thought the perspective was done really well and could just picture Lois and Clark's daughter rushing around.

There was a ton of personality in the wording also--I really loved the use of 'hafta'...that added SO much, hard to explain exactly why I enjoyed it as much as I did . Also, calling a Kerth a 'glass rock'--perfect! I can see a younger person totally going there with that word choice for a description .

Love the Lynn Stories
Laura

Adorable!
So she must be a teenager, right?

Lol...very cute! I have a vision of a kid looking up into the sky, totally confused, as a girl in a ball gown is hovering above him, staring at a map. Someone is SO grounded when Lois finds out!

I completely agree. I believe someone was supposed to arrive via cab, not flight.

I can't see Clark getting out this without a lecture from his wife about setting ground rules either. Then Clark responding how he couldn't expect that his daughter would do that because that wouldn't have been something HE would have attempted. To which Lois would answer that he should have known better "Because *she's* MY daughter, too!"

Morgana, you are right. When Lois finds out about this flight, the narrator will undoubtedly be grounded (both figuratively and literally) for a veeeery long time.

Laura, you always leave the best, most encouraging feedback. Thank you. I must admit that I share the narrator's view of the design of the Kerth award. It may be prestigious, but it isn't a whole lot to look at.

Queenie, right in one. Old enough to be allowed to navigate through the city on her own, old enough to be able to fly (although probably not old enough to be *allowed* to fly in public), but young enough to still be answerable to Mom and Dad, and in-between enough to cop a bit of an attitude with her father. I envision her as being 17 or 18.

Groobie, I hadn't pictured the person looking up as being a kid, necessarily, but I had amused myself with images of a gown-wearing teenager hovering (possibly sitting cross-legged) in the air, and staring at an unfolded map with a puzzled and somewhat frustrated look on her face. I'm tickled by the absurdity of the image, and that was one of the reasons I wanted to write the story. Thanks for pointing it out.

And thank you all for leaving feedback.

Joy,
Lynn

Hi Virginia. Our posts seem to have crossed.

Well, I would hope that he wouldn't attempt to fly across the city in an evening gown.

A very good point, even if Lois is thereby implicitly taking on some of the blame. (Clark, of course, would be too polite to point that out to her.)

Joy,
Lynn

Well, only that one time he lost that bet with Batman.

And if he had won the bet, what would Batman have to have done?

Joy,
Lynn

BATMAN: I don't take bets I could lose. I'm Batman.

Hmmm... I deduce that you've been watching the "How It Should Have Ended" videos. (I can just see and hear him saying that.)

Joy,
Lynn

Someone write this now!

Hi Lynn!
…between Lois and Superman is Clark?
LOIS:

Teenage Clark?

Oh, teenage offspring of super-powered reporter and super reporter.

College? So, not a teenager.

Well, might be 19…

Oh boy. LnC got Trouble at home.

Huh?

Hmm…2005-2007 is just before google maps came en vogue, isn’t it?

Never heard about a compass, has she?


VOICE of Master Luwin: One half of a league east as the raven flies.

Easy. Usually, he has to rescue Lois, so her heartbeat will be like a homing beacon. The other times, being a boyscout helps.
CLARK: Also, moss always grows on the northern side of the antenna on the sky scrapers.



So long as she doesn’t mention that it’s not like this year’s any different from last year, what with Lois being the runner up and Clark taking home the Kerth

Don’t they usually put the more prestigious categories at the end?
LOIS:

Maybe the little one shouldn’t mention that term out loud.

But she might ground her. On the plus side, Kryptonite would at least allow the little one the typical college experience of getting drunk and consuming moderate amounts of mind-altering substances?
LITTLE ONE: Like Red Kryptonite?

That was fun. Umm…sorry for making the FDK longer than the story?

Michael

Edit: As for the gown-sitting: This might also be unfortunate in terms of potential for exposure. There once was a bit of an outcry when some architect thought it clever, to make a stairwell out of glass. Hilarious!

And Clark probably never had to face that problem. All he had to remember was fly left at the water tower until he sees cows, then fly right again. If he sees more cows, he flew too far.

Also...Say, Lynn, is there any chance for sequels in this universe?

Hi Michael,

Thanks for your note. I envision the narrator to still be in high school. Who says that high school students don't use the library for their studies? Admittedly, with the rise of the Internet, it is becoming much rarer now even for college students to do so, but I can't see any child of Lane and Kent not using all of the research materials at her disposal.
A compass would only help if she knew which direction she needed to go. Now, if she were trying to find the comic book Clark's Fortress of Solitude, a compass would at least get her in the general vicinity.

(Quick online search...) Ah. I haven't gotten into Thrones. That series is on my "give a try" list for when I retire and finally have time to sit down for more than ten minutes at a stretch.

I'd love to have sat in on one of his boy scout meetings. (Of course, if Lois had done so, it would have made Tank happy, since she would have needed to get a haircut as part of her disguise to blend in. At least, she would have had to in one of his story. We'll just ignore the opening scene of the pilot for now.)

If she survived this long, she must have some sense of self-preservation, even if she lacks some other senses (common sense, horse sense, not to mention a sense of direction).

Yup. But I imagine they have some sort of closing ceremony afterward. (The "I imagine" in that last sentence gives you an idea of how often I watch any sort of awards ceremony.)

See earlier comment re: self-preservation.

You do come up with the most humorous and appropriate graemlins/emoji/whatchamacallems.

No apologies are ever necessary for feedback. The more, the better.

Yup. That thought had crossed my mind, as well, but since I don't write nfic, I thought I'd omit that little detail.

I should hope not, although see Virginia's earlier comments.

I'm honoured that you asked. If my muse agrees, I'm always amenable to writing sequels. Unfortunately, she is rarely into them. I've a feeling that the narrator of this story will probably bribe my muse not to have a sequel, since any such story would likely deal with the consequences of her flighty actions. If she avoids a sequel, she can dodge the grounding that it would contain.

Thanks again for leaving such detailed (and, as always, humorous) feedback.

Joy,
Lynn

Not necessarily, Lynn. You could always skip the consequences (or just mention them in passing) and just show us another super mis-hap adventure from the POV from this character. That could actually lead to a fun series of one-shots. /nudge, nudge/

Yes, Virginia's idea is great!
/nudge, nudge/ Oh dear, did I just nudge Prometheus out of orbit?

Michael