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I saw part 6 soon after you posted it, but my laptop was dying so I only had time to read it, not comment.. and then yesterday was busy... anyway... great section! I see Parks' reputation is going to be a bit of a problem <g> But hey, Thoroski's a resourceful guy; he'll figure something out.
Part 7, please??
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"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
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Yay, part 7!  Glad to know that the Underground is sending in the big guns. And fun to see Smythe jumping on Thoroski <g> I knew he was an Undergrounder, from a different story, but wasn't quite sure why he wasn't picking up on Thoroski's plans. But if he couldn't read him clearly, that explains it. And he's a smart boy to take the risk, because if Thoroski disappeared in anything like suspicious circumstances, everyone would be investigated. I sympathise with the stunner hangover; last week I had a migraine that lasted for two days and ended up puking my guts out, so I can report that it really really is miserable. So... part 8? PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
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"I have a...."
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Part 8--great! I am wondering how far they will have to go into the hospital before they find out that Lyn is no longer there?
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Hee, love it when there are competing rescues! Reminds me of Cops & Robbers. Poor Mark & Alan, going to all this trouble for nothing... <g>
And Thoroski's going to get her off Corala the same way she got onto Corala -- sweet! He and Greg do make a good team. Now, how is he going to return her to the Underground so he can sign up? Well, silly question, I guess -- Greg will know. Still, I expect it'll be fun to read.
As always, looking forward to more...
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"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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Thoroski drove past, glancing idly at the insignia and the two patrolmen in the front seat, noting with mild interest that the car bore the seal of Lord Revolthvor's House, Hehe, so close and yet so far. I can't wait for the part 9  Tara
Rose: You're NOT keeping the horse!
Doctor Who: I let you keep Mickey, now lets go!
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Nan, I don't mean to nag... well, okay, maybe I do... but it's been two days since the last part and I'm having such a frustrating day that I'd really like a new section to enjoy just about now. PJ (how 'bout now?  )
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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I would, Pam, but it's been such a busy two days that I only have a page and a half typed. My washing machine quit, among other things, not to mention the cat threw up on the router night before last and I didn't even have internet access for most of yesterday, and this afternoon is Jimmy's bowling day. I'll do my best, but I can't promise to be done with the next part today.
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Well, okay, that might be worse than my bad day Hope you get it all sorted out promptly, if only for your sanity's sake. PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
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Yes! Part 9 is up!  How could you leave it like that get back here with the rest of it  Please? Janine Edit: woops sorry didn't read earlier comments, hope everthing works out
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I've gotta stop reading comments before checking if the new part is up Good stuff here, but of course the best part was at the end, when -- as we knew would happen -- Alan discovers that Lyn is gone. But the cliffhanger is when -- as we did not anticipate -- a Jil showed up! Will he recognize them?? Will Alan's shielding hold up? Enquiring minds want to know... but seriously, take care of your RL stuff first. PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
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Man, time flies when you are taking classes and trolling for jobs... 4 parts are up already!
Downloading now for later enjoyment...
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Wow, Park's is not only hated, but lucky, too.
Too bad for the rest of the universe...
Does he ever get his just rewards?
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Lol, James. Mr. Parks is still needed for the story, but rest assured he does get what is coming to him.
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So, you're going to post the next part today, right?  Tara
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More soon please?  Pretty please? Janine
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"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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I only have 4 pages done. I hope to post it on Sunday.
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Yay! You posted... I was hoping Alan could evade the Jil, but am not a bit sorry to see Griffen join the Jil-killer club And they bluffed their way out of the room, so that was good. Glad to see that someone recognized Thoroski; I'd wondered about that when he passed Revolthvor's car. Poor Alan, what a crack on the head! Good thing he had someone along who *wasn't* linked to him... Sometimes I tell Mark & Alan bedtime stories to my kids <g> (suitably edited, of course) and my daughter especially liked the bit in Mines of Kuloghi where Alan gets hit and Mark blacks out. She thought it was hilarious. Can't wait to tell her that it's happened again, times two! PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
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Y'know, the only thing I don't like about this story is that it got me hooked on the series. After reading the latest chapter, I had to get another "fix," so I read one of the few Terran Underground stories I had not read yet and went to bed three hours late. <Yawn> So it's your fault if I can't stay awake today. (Coffee? Where's the coffee? We'd better not be out!)
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Thanks for the FDK so far.
The next part is going to be a little delayed. I'm in the middle of my annual accounting of my brother's finances, which, may I say, is a pain in the you-know-what.
I'll have the next part up as soon as I can.
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