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Since there aren't that many readers, let's consolidate any feedback here.
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Woo-hoo! I've been in TU withdrawal... and I've been wanting to see this one for ages...
Okay, now that I've read part 1... you're right, not a happy beginning. Damned Jils. Why do I get the feeling that Thoroski is going to make them pay?
Waiting anxiously for part 2 and beyond...
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"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
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Wait just a minute, you can't leave it there, get back here with the rest of it.  Janine
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I noticed that typed manuscript on your desk the other day and I was kind of hoping you'd be posting something here soon  I like Thoroski. I don't like so much why he decided to change sides, though  Oh well, it's nice to see this up here. Now, where's the rest? Tara
Rose: You're NOT keeping the horse!
Doctor Who: I let you keep Mickey, now lets go!
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And at what point do Our Heros show up? <g> One of the other stories implied that Lyn was involved here, too...
PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
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yay another update!!! I wasn't sure what your schedule would look like.
it's like meeting old friends again, after being parted for months lol.
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Good solid part; more set-up but action, but it's good set-up.
And Mark saying "oh hell, you know the rest" made me giggle. The whole sequence usually makes me grin and this was the icing on the cake.
Can't wait to see where it goes from here.
PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
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No, that can't be it. I need more. Please?  Janine
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"You stay in the car, Lyn," Mark said. "We'll be back in a few minutes." Famous last words... But what happens *next*?? I'm trying to figure out how Thoroski gets mixed up in this, since obviously things are headed in that direction... I thought he was going on leave? PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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Ah, some things become clearer... and I suspect that good old Willie Parks is about to depart this mortal plane... good riddance. And if Thoroski wants to take out Arnie Paine, as well, I wouldn't object It's fun seeing Greg & Gallagher, too. Looking forward to seeing how things get to where they're going... PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
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Woohoo! Another section is up  Looks like Willie Parks about to get what coming to him  Janine
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But where's part #5??? It's been, like, two whole days...  PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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I'll probably post the next part Monday. Jimmy's birthday was the 19th, and we're taking him to Disneyland on Sunday.
I'm glad you're enjoying the story. It only accelerates from here.
Nan
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Have fun at Disney! We'll be here when you get back. PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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Love how this one is going. Nice splicing together of the different players. Patty seems familier for some reason...
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Thanks. I'll be posting the next part later today. First I have some errands downtown to complete.
James, you're probably thinking of Luanne, on Shallock.
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Of course I remember Willie Parks. Patty's right, he's a real trenchcrawler. Just about as smart as one, too. I'll have to keep an eye out for Dooley, next time I re-read Shell Game. Anyway... so Thoroski's going to be on guard duty. Without Dooley, it looks like, so maybe it'll be someone who doesn't know Parks. Looking forward to part 6. And, you know, since you made us wait so long for part 5, I think you should go ahead and post part 6 now  PJ (how about now?)
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
--Stardust, Caroline K
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I agree, she should definitely post part 6 now. I'm kind of tempted to sneak over there when she's not looking and grab the rest of the manuscript and read it again  Tara
Rose: You're NOT keeping the horse!
Doctor Who: I let you keep Mickey, now lets go!
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Finally de-lurking again--
Thanks for posting part 6 so quickly. I got to read both 5 and 6 in the same evening, yay! I had not read any of your series before you posted part 1, but I really needed something to read one evening so I went ahead and read it, and now I am hooked! I have read almost every story that is less than 50,000 words, and I am trying to get to the others, but I'll have to wait until I have a weekend free because they're like popcorn or potato chips--once I start, I can't stop. Everyone wonders why I've been falling asleep at work all week, and I don't dare tell them it's because I've been reading your stories all night long. The only problem is the stories that still aren't posted--your public is waiting!!!!
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