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Thanks for posting, Nan Well, the teaser was tense, but part 1 was kinda funny. Let's see... we had Kev & Mark fighting (brothers!), then Kev diapering a baby, then Mark informing him of his own experience diapering Kevin Alan's not feeling well, and is shortly going to be a girl... maybe he's pregnant! Going back on the Patton is fun. I still sometimes quote to myself "I'd take off that nametag if I were you" and it still makes me laugh. Looking forward to another fun ride! PJ who figures we might as well stick with one feedback folder, mustn't waste, um, pixels...
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed. He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement." "You can say that again," she told him. "I have a...." "Oh, shut up."
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Alan's not feeling well, and is shortly going to be a girl... maybe he's pregnant! [Goofy] Tara
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Alan as a girl/woman! SNORT!!!
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I'm headed to LAFF tomorrow, so expect the next part next week. I'm going to try to get the next part of Murder done before tomorrow.
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So, mom, whatever happened to the next part of Wonderland Revisited? Please say you're posting soon Tara
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it's probably earthquake related...
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I'll try to post soon. I've been a bit busy this week -- My son and his family are arriving Sunday for a visit and a couple of trips to Disneyland. Since the house looks like an earthquake hit it, I've been trying to clean and get it ready.
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PS: All we felt here was a little bump and rattle. I thought it might be a quake but I wasn't even sure of that until it was mentioned on the radio about five minutes later. Anything under a 5.5 doesn't faze most Californians. We've seen too many of them.
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Okay, part 2... The crew of the Patton crack me up. Especially Jerry Thompkins being proud of having been stuffed in a laundry bag! This should be a fun ride. PJ
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Can't wait until you finish this one off! It will be read!
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So, they may have been recognized... but this is the Patton, after all. Might be more of a help than otherwise And why do I think that Alan's roommate (and her natural sheilding) is going to turn out to be very important? I read this shortly after you posted it, btw, but was in a hurry so I didn't comment. It's great, of course. Gimme more! PJ
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Yay, part 4! Looks like they're picking up a valuable ally in Jase -- not to mention a new recruit. And then there's Alan's roommate... I have the feeling her natural shielding is going to come in handy. Heck, maybe they'll recruit the entire crew! I love the Patton... PJ
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Part 5 So we can expect more soon right? Janine
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Two parts! Yay! Way to go, Jase. I still wanna know what's up with Alan's dizzy spells, though. Part 7 soon? Please? PJ
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Yes, fully posted!
Will update and read soon.
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Okay, that's it. I'll try to decide which one to go for next. Sorry this one took so long. I've had a lot of real life on my plate recently.
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Yay, part 7! Except... um... that means it's the *last* part... Anyway, I'm glad to see I was right about Jessie. And that there's nothing seriously wrong with Alan, he's just been overloading himself. So, I guess he's *not* pregnant... Well, until you start the next new one, I guess I'll have to be satisfied with re-runs. I went back to re-read Two Giants for David, to refresh my memory of the Patton. PJ
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Awakenings or Rite of Passage would be nice... James
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I vote for Awakenings, too! That's one even I haven't seen yet! Tara
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I'd like to see Defector. Why did Strike Commander Thoroski join the underground, anyway? I've seen references to him in several stories, and I'm curious. Plus it's the next story after Wonderland Revisited, so it'd be logical. But I'm sure I'll be happy with whatever you pick, Nan. PJ
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