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 Ok...here's where you say the good stuff and the bad stuff.  Bella
Lois : And you know, you put up with me for the same reason I put up with you. It's because I'm completely in love with you."
Clark : "And I love you. Did we just make up?"
Lois : "I think so."
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AArgghh!!!  Jose 
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Whoops!
Was I supposed help close this up? Or make it worse?
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Lois : And you know, you put up with me for the same reason I put up with you. It's because I'm completely in love with you."
Clark : "And I love you. Did we just make up?"
Lois : "I think so."
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Hi, Wow! Great piece.
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Arrrrrrrrrrgggggggggggggggghhhhhhhh! No, Lois, you can't do it! She blocked out the memory. She was making the right decision. Can I bop her? She needs a severe bopping. <g> Well, this was a great addition to the story, Bella!  Well done! You've certainly stirred things up and left plenty of options for next author up. Clark to the rescue (we hope) Next! LabRat 
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Thanks for all the great feedback guys. I was really tempted to wrap things up, but I enjoyed Lois's internal struggle so much I ended up going a different way. But I left it wide open for someone to pick this bad-boy up. But I know how you feel about the bopping, Labrat. hehe It's way to easy to smack Lois in this arc.  B 
Lois : And you know, you put up with me for the same reason I put up with you. It's because I'm completely in love with you."
Clark : "And I love you. Did we just make up?"
Lois : "I think so."
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Nice addition.
Just enough agrivation to make the gentle readers want to slap Lois up side the head, yet you've given the next poster an out by having Lois get in touch with Henderson.
I look forward to seeing where someone takes off from here. You've set up various posibilities for the next instalment with Henderson's phone call, Clark's as yet unknown presense, and Lex.
Tank (who hopes the next instalment doesn't take quite as long)
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Nice part! Angsty and evil and all that good stuff. And if Labby doesn't bop Lois, I have a PokingStick(TM). And I'm not afraid to use it . . . Hope to see more writing from you, Bella.
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Do we take this as volunteering for Part 8, perhaps? Well, we can always hope. Nice part, Bella. I have to agree that I really wanted to bop Lois over the head with a 2x4. With so many doubts about whether Lex is evil incarnate, she still seems ready to go ahead and marry him even when she has a phone call pending from the one man who can give her evidence of Lex's veracity. What did she think she would do if she married Lex and then got a call from Henderson, who then proceeded to tell her that everything Lex told her was a pack of lies? A suspicious Lois who doesn't seem to want to wait on the evidence? If this was anything other than BatP/HOL arc, I'd say she was behaving WAYYYY out of character. But it seems here, anything goes. (hum Cole Porter here) This next part should be interesting. If Clark heard Lois mention Henderson's name, I'm sure Luthor heard it as well. Knowing that she's checking up on Luthor, I'm rather surprised Lois mentioned the Inspector out loud, tipping off Luthor that his alibi is in trouble. I see Luthor swooping in to interrupt the phone call, convincing Lois that she can wait to talk to the Inspector until after the wedding. Then just as they're about to head for the airport...in comes Clark, who bops himself on the head and fails to save the day. Then Lois marries Lex and lives sadly ever after until she's saved by this strange man from Minnesota who nurses her back to mental health. THE END. That plot should at least make Tank happy. Good job, Bella! So who is really going to volunteer for Part 8?
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Originally posted by RL: I see Luthor swooping in to interrupt the phone call, convincing Lois that she can wait to talk to the Inspector until after the wedding. Then just as they're about to head for the airport...in comes Clark, who bops himself on the head and fails to save the day. Then Lois marries Lex and lives sadly ever after until she's saved by this strange man from Minnesota who nurses her back to mental health. THE END. That plot should at least make Tank happy.
Lois : And you know, you put up with me for the same reason I put up with you. It's because I'm completely in love with you."
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Bella A wonderful addition! Great job! I like how Lois Contacts Henderson. But yikes, I can't believe that she's still considering marrying Lex.  I'm looking forward to seeing where the next writer takes this. Tricia 
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Do we take this as volunteering for Part 8, perhaps? Well, we can always hope. Eeep! Thanks for the sweet thought, Roger, but doubt it. Actually, it might be fun, but I don't think I have the time right now to go back and refresh my memory on the previous segments to be able to continue the story logically. However, it rather seems to me that you have some thoughts on the direction this might take yourself, good buddy, and don't think there's anything in the rules says a particular author can only do one segment....  LabRat
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</font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif"> However, it rather seems to me that you have some thoughts on the direction this might take yourself, good buddy, and don't think there's anything in the rules says a particular author can only do one segment....  Bella
Lois : And you know, you put up with me for the same reason I put up with you. It's because I'm completely in love with you."
Clark : "And I love you. Did we just make up?"
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Very well done
Hope someone writes part 8 quickly
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-- Roger
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I'm dying here. 
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Are you volunteering to write it, ethnica?
Do you know the most surprising thing about divorce? It doesn't actually kill you, like a bullet to the heart or a head-on car wreck. It should. When someone you've promised to cherish till death do you part says, "I never loved you," it should kill you instantly.
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At the moment I could only post on weekends - out of town during the week in a development program, son in college took my laptop, and would be hardpressed to explain how L&C is business related if I used the company's computers. But, if you could wait a little bit longer...
And be gentle since it would be my first time...
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Oh goody! A volunteer! I look forward to seeing part 8 as soon as you can manage, ethnica.
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Yay, someone who will write Part 8! It's been so long since Part 7 that I'm just relieved someone has volunteered. Of course, it is the weekend coming up in a few hours.
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Yay!!!!  Jose
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Didn't want you to think I'd forgotten, but RL has been kicking me around (and I had an anniversary, which is a good thing, but time-consuming ). My respect for the real writers has increased dramatically , lemme tell you. 
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We'll be waiting. We might even do it semi-patiently.
Do you know the most surprising thing about divorce? It doesn't actually kill you, like a bullet to the heart or a head-on car wreck. It should. When someone you've promised to cherish till death do you part says, "I never loved you," it should kill you instantly.
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For some reason, I can't find Part 7  Somebody help 
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Hey, J-10, ltns! Here ya go!
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Hey Ethnica! How goes the story? -Breanna Kay
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Honestly, I'm ashamed to post what I've got. Maybe if somebody could read it and tell me what they think?
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I'm sure some one would be happy to beta read for you! I'd offer, but I've not been feeling too good lately (my sis has Walking Pneumonia and I've been coughing and feeling blah too) so I'm not much for concentrating. just do a quick post under "Fanfic Related" asking for a beta reader for it -Breanna
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