I liked the start, although it took me awhile to realize that Clark was not just some bum.
At first, he starting hanging out near the front doors, but it was obvious folks didn't want someone like him around.
I still did not clue in that he was not just some bum. I think you want to say "Started".
So he went to one of the side doors and hoped she would show up there.
I was sure Lois was menat.
After a couple of days, she did indeed show up.
I think by now I was suspecting he might now be human, despite "traveling man" being said at the start.
Lois' eyes widened when she saw him. "Boy, aren't you a site for sore eyes. You're about the scruffiest thing I've seen."
At this point I decided he was a dog. I figured he was just a dog named Clark though. I had no noticed the "fuzzy memory" line at the start.
He followed her and sat right down in the front seat. Ah, yes, he was finally home. This was the woman he loved, and he hoped her love for him had grown in his absence.
Reading it a second time, this line makes perfect sense.
Lois had missed Clark badly when he had suddenly disappeared.
I should have realized what happened here. However I just figured that either a-she wass thinking about a dog in both places or b-the real Clark had gone, and this dog was also Clark. Maybe new Krypton took longer than expected.
He'd only been her partner for about a month, but, oh, what a month.
He was removed from the picture quickly.
She had started falling for him
I just realized something. Is there no Superman in this universe? Is this a Superman free LnC story?
and absence had indeed made her heart grow fonder. She had to admit that she loved him.
This makes a lot of sense in a Superman-free universe.
Clark just grunted and looked at her like she'd grown a third eye.
You know, I am not sure why I assumed he was a dog, but that was definately my assumption all along. I guess cats don't do much begging, and no other animal would work either.
That was his name. What was wrong with the woman. When she looked at him expectantly, Clark just nodded. Why didn't she recognize him?
At first I was wondering if he realized he was a dog. However then I realized it was probably more that he did not realize he was not always a dog. Or as a dog the whole issue was too complexed for him to full grasp either way.
Clark was so excited, he thought he burst.
I thin you wanted to say "he'd" here.
"She what you can do with him. I'll be back to get him later."
I think you want Lois to open her statement with See.
She sat down on the sofa beside of him and ordered pizza.
I think just "beside him" works, no need for the of.
Clark was enthusiastic about both the pizza and Lois sitting beside of him.
Same here.
"Now, you just wait a darn minute..." But when she looked into those big eyes of his, she relented. "Well, okay, just one. She grabbed his cheeks and gave him a quick peck right on the mouth." That was when she screamed. She immediately thought of kissing a frog and getting a handsome prince. Only she'd kissed a dog.
Whispers, "I think you want to end the quote after one. The next sentance describes Lois's actions.
The rest of the story was fun too. I especially liked Lois sending Luthor to a shelter that would give him proper pre-adoption treatment.
