Jocelyn, that was a nice, sweet story. While I'm not sure that I buy Lois making a move on her incipient feelings for Clark so early in their friendship, you explored the outcome in an interesting manner. There are a number of typos and minor grammar errors which you might want to run by your beta reader, but I really only have one major nitpick with your story. Why did you have Lois die in 2011?
This would mean she died at the age of 44, was married to Clark for a maximum of 16 years, and would make her two children orphans at a pretty young age.
Was that your intention? Otherwise, it might make for a more fulfilling ending to up the date of her death on the gravestone by at least a few decades.
Just a suggestion, but it would make the story work better for me.
Hope you keep writing, Terry
