It's all good. I'm pretty good with commas myself.
What I really need is someone to tell me whether or not they think it works, if I got the characterizations right, etc. I also had a lot of other references to past episodes I wanted to fit in, but couldn't find the space in the plot.
Most of the references to episodes right now are kind of vague, and the episode it's set during is one of the flash-forwards, where Ares is going after one of Xena's reincarnations.
I guess I'll just wait a couple more days to see if anyone else here is interested, and if not, I'll just post the story to fanfiction.net un-beta'd
"You take turns, advise and protect one another, even heal or be healed when the going gets too tough. I know! That's not a game--that's friendship!" ~Shelly Mezzanoble,
Confessions of a Part-Time Sorceress: A Girl's Guide to the Dungeons & Dragons Game Darcy\'s Place
