Excellent part, Yvonne! (As usual.)
I love the way you reveal Lois's feelings:
Stage 1:
It wasn’t until she heard his little gasp of surprise that she realised just what she’d said. Darn. She didn’t mean it, of course. Just one of those automatic responses people gave, but she was too tired to correct herself or to enter into a long discussion with him about her feelings. She’d sort it out later.
Stage 2:
His soft murmur made her pause, but she didn’t turn back immediately. Somewhere deep within her, she recognised the emotions behind that single, softly spoken word, but she wasn’t ready to acknowledge those feelings yet.
Much better.
Stage 3:
“You’re so intent on this macho, there’s-nothing-wrong-with-me routine, you forget what effect it has on me,” she told him. “I don’t just care, Clark, I hurt. When you’re in pain, so am I.”
Aww! A lot better
And the ending...
Wonder how Lois is going to react.
MORE SOON!!
AnnaBtG.
