Hey, lovesuper!
That is absolutely hilarious! What is it about that commercial that makes everybody want to make fun of it? My friends and I did for weeks!
Now, most people post their stories in the Fanfic section. If you do that, a lot more people will be able to see it and appreciate it and help you on it. BTW, if you ever need a Beta Reader, I'll be glad to volunteer! Not that I'm bragging or anything, but I'm quite good with grammar and punctuation.
Cya!
Sarah
P.S. Instead of "Herble esstinse", try "Herbal Essence".
